Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Through different forms of print and digital media, we come across reports that, In this time increasing number of tourism at difficult places like, The Antarctica, that places have difficult environment and risk for health. As every phenomenon has, this also leads to merits and demerits. I would outline them in detail with some interesting examples.

As far as positive aspects are concerned, the first which I consider is that tourist enjoy unique experiences. This view exists as visitors can experienced unique atmosphere and unusual landscapes. As a result, visiting Antarctica allows people to see glaciers, penguins and wildlife. Moreover, an added advantage is that also good for adventure and personal development. Generally speaking, Difficult destinations provide exciting challenges. Therefore, Travellers may become more confident, resilient and fearless. For instance, visitors play important role to generate GDP of nations.

On the other hand, downsides are evident. One of them is that is major impact on health and safety risks for visitors. As a matter of fact, Extreme temperature, dehydration, storms and difficult terrain can put tourists at risk. So, Medical facilities may be limited in remote areas. To add fuel into fire, People are main factor for environmental damage. This can be justified as a large number of visitors can disturb wildlife and damage fragile ecosystems. Hence, Tourists may also leave rubbish and waste behind and not following basic rules. For example, Travelling to remote places can be costly and require special equipment and guides.

In a nutshell, down the lane, The trip can improving economy of particular places through tourism but also bad effects on environment and animals. It is recommended that government should make strict rules and take a valid actions against rule breakers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both the benefits and disadvantages of visiting extreme environments. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While the benefits (unique experiences, personal development) are mentioned, the supporting examples are occasionally disconnected, such as the mention of GDP generation, which does not directly explain how a tourist benefits from the visit. The disadvantages are better supported with specific examples like extreme temperatures and environmental damage. To reach a higher band, ensure that every point made is directly linked to the prompt's requirement to discuss the impact on the tourist themselves, rather than shifting focus to the host nation's economy.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'As far as... are concerned', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'To add fuel into fire' or 'down the lane', which are not used in their standard idiomatic contexts. Additionally, some sentences lack smooth transitions, making the progression of ideas feel a bit disjointed at times. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would enhance the flow of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey their meaning clearly. There are attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'fragile ecosystems', 'remote areas', and 'resilient'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'In this time increasing number of tourism' and 'take a valid actions'. Some phrasing is repetitive or slightly unidiomatic. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('The Antarctica'), subject-verb agreement ('tourist enjoy'), and sentence fragments or run-on sentences. For example, 'The trip can improving economy' should be 'can improve the economy'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas appearing in several places. While the errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the message, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for small errors would be beneficial.

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