Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.
What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
People have different view regarding whether a person should visit the difficult terrains on earth. We will discuss the pros and cons of adventure tourism. In my opinion, a person should visit the world's toughest places, just to have a life time experience.
The advantage of visiting is that a person can get a unique experience that he will not get at a crowded tourist place. For example, a person visit taj mahal can seen the beauty of the mounument but there is alot of people. Instead he visit himalayas, there is no crowd and the experience is dangerous but also unique. That i why I always like to recommend a unique place rather than a famous tourist spot.
The disadvantage of hard terrain is the risk is life. There is always risk of life at every step including harsh weather and hard living conditions. and another factor is cost of visit because there are very few numbers of
way, it can be travelled. For example, the people who visit antartica have to face thw negative temparatures and the less availablity of food, Which makes it even harder to visit that palce.
In my Opion, a person should visit a hard terrain like sahara or antartica for one of the unique lifetime experience rather than visiting some famous tourist spot which can be visit by anyone in the world.
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both the benefits and disadvantages of visiting difficult terrains, such as the Sahara or Antarctica. However, the ideas are under-developed and lack sufficient detail to fully explore the topic. The response is also under the 250-word minimum requirement, which significantly impacts the depth of the argument. While a position is stated, the supporting examples are brief and somewhat repetitive. To improve, you should expand on your points with more specific explanations and ensure you meet the minimum word count to allow for a more thorough discussion of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical. For instance, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. There are also issues with referencing and logical flow, such as the sentence 'Instead he visit himalayas', which lacks a clear subject-verb connection to the previous thought. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You rely on simple terms like 'hard', 'difficult', and 'unique' throughout the text. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'mounument', 'antartica', 'thw', 'temparatures', and 'Opion'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including more precise adjectives and nouns related to travel and environmental conditions, and pay closer attention to spelling accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'a person visit taj mahal can seen'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'can be visit'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of capital letters and sentence fragments. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect word forms.
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