Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Visiting extreme places on earth has became more popular among tourists the before, which comes with some advantages also dome disadvantages on the other hand. While there is benefits for the authority but the risks can not be ignored at all.

Visitors are an asset for a country. While tourists are boosting the economy of a country, they them self can increase their knowledge by visiting a particular place. As a result Places with extreme conditions are becoming popular tourist destination. Amazon forest, Sahara desert and Antarctic are some example of those places. Individuals visiting these places can give their curious mind a destination that solves their all questions. From doing scientific research to inventing new species, visiting challenging places has a vast importance. On the other hand the country or the territory is getting economically benefited. Whereas governments are advertising their country to increase the number of tourists, places like those are an advertisement by its own. People remembers country or region by the name of those extreme tourists places. Whereas there are a lots of benefits to discuss but the risks and the drawbacks are can not be ignored.

Extreme places in earth has some own rules own species. Increasing visitors traffic has became a big reason to worry for the biodiversity of the particular place. For instance in Antarctic tourism has became quite common. More human traffic has made more ships to go to the continent. These are increasing the temperature of of the continent. Resulting melting ice burgs. Moreover the penguins and other species living on that space are in danger because of the frequent human visits that is basically disturbing their habitat. In Amazon forest more visitors are causing more trouble such as cutting trees, disturbing the wild life that lives there.

To grow, learn and invent tourism in extreme places like those may be important but we must follow strict rule to save the biodiversity of the particular area. Furthermore we must remember, causing harm for the nature can not bring us anything positive.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both the benefits and disadvantages of tourism in extreme environments. The ideas are relevant, such as economic growth and scientific discovery as benefits, and environmental degradation as a disadvantage. However, the development of these points is somewhat superficial. For instance, the mention of 'inventing new species' is factually confusing and lacks clarity. While the position is clear, the arguments could be more deeply explored with more specific examples or logical chains to reach a higher band. The response covers all parts of the prompt, but the depth of analysis is limited, keeping it at a solid mid-range level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'On the other hand', 'For instance', and 'Moreover'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'Whereas' at the start of sentences. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the flow between sentences is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and grammatical errors. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the benefits from the drawbacks, which helps the reader follow the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'extreme places in earth' instead of 'on Earth' and 'human traffic' which is slightly unnatural in this context. Some phrases are repetitive, and there is a lack of sophisticated collocations. While the meaning is generally clear, the lexical range is limited to basic or common terms, and there are minor errors in word formation, such as 'economically benefited' instead of 'benefited economically'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('has became', 'is benefits'), article usage ('the Antarctic'), and awkward sentence construction ('the risks and the drawbacks are can not be ignored'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent and occur in both simple and complex sentences. A greater focus on proofreading for basic tense consistency and preposition usage would significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of the writing.

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