Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.
What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
There are splits of views, where some think that visiting the place. on the other side the people are scard to go such places. In the upcoming decision i will put my opinions on the both side.
Many people think that visiting harsh environments is enjoyable. Because they love to challenge themself with different activities. Where the weather might be not suitable for the them but it their pension to go there and have fun. However, some visit this place for research purposes, Which help them understand nature and how can it be resolve certain problem for animals which such place.
On the other hand, people may think going into such places can be dangerous. It can be very dangerous for them to go and challenge conditions like Antarctica where only ice and water surface is available to rome. Also some time it very difficult to go into ice you slip and get injured yourself.
To conclude, I would say there are some who syas that going into deserts or waters arear are very enjoyable. however, People on the other side think that it can be dangerous for life to go such place.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both benefits and disadvantages, the arguments are superficial and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. The introduction is unclear and contains grammatical errors that obscure the writer's intent. The body paragraphs do not fully explore the complexities of the topic, resulting in an under-developed response that only partially addresses the prompt. To improve, you must expand your points with specific examples and ensure your position is clearly stated and maintained throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or incorrect, such as the awkward transition 'On the other side the people are scard'. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the relationship between sentences is not always logical. The conclusion is repetitive and does not effectively summarize the main points. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly relates to the prompt.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'pension' (likely meant 'passion') and 'rome' (meant 'roam'). The range of vocabulary is basic, and the essay relies on simple, often inaccurate, phrasing. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'extreme environments', 'expedition', 'ecological research', or 'inherent risks'. Improving your spelling and learning common collocations will also help you communicate your ideas more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, sentence fragments, and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'it their pension', 'how can it be resolve', 'waters arear'). The range of sentence structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with occasional errors in complex structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency before attempting more complex structures.
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