Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A growing number of people are visiting tourist locations where weather conditions are severe and difficult for normal people to live like the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. Exploring this type of places provide them educational opportunities and better for the development of professional skills, whereas it would be risky for people who already have health issues and could be expensive as compared to normal trips.

Numerous people in the recent era wanted to discover something unique and exciting in order to explore breathtaking view of nature and see marine life. For instance, visiting the Antarctic ocean facilitate explorers to gain in-depth knowledge about sea creatures, get a chance to do water activities like scuba-diving, swimming and take beautiful photos at natural locations. Additionally, they can learn about the detrimental effects of climate chances of un-touched natural spots like water level of the ocean increases day by day. Apart from that, living in an extreme hot or cold weather teach them to how to survive in this conditions without basic facilities. As a result, it will be responsible for the development of organization, time-management and critical-thinking skills.

On the contrast, this types of trips will be more risky and in certain situations extreme cold living environment result in the fatal conditions or may be leads to health problems for the tourists. Also, the limited facilities like public transports, accommodations and foods create trouble for them during their trip. Whereas, this kind of travelling are costly and needs lot of hard work and mental strength in order to cope with unforeseen problems. Most importantly, human activities in naturally untouched locations disturb wildlife and throwing plastic rubbish in ocean. Consequently, litter could be enter in marine creature's body and damage their reproductive and digestive systems. Which is responsible for extinction of marine species.

In conclusion, exploring unfamiliar tourist locations provide visitors captivating view of natural beauty, thrilling feelings and knowledge about marine life, how to use natural resources and so on. Though, it can damage ecosystems, leads to health issues and unsafe and expensive as compared to normal trips.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying benefits such as educational opportunities and skill development, and disadvantages like health risks, high costs, and environmental impact. The position is clear throughout. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed; for instance, the link between visiting extreme locations and 'organization' or 'time-management' skills is asserted rather than explained in detail. The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points. To reach a higher band, ensure that each supporting point is fully explored with more specific reasoning or illustrative examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'For instance', 'Additionally', 'Apart from that', and 'On the contrast'. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical or misused, such as 'On the contrast' (should be 'In contrast') and the use of 'Which' to start a sentence in the third paragraph, which creates a fragmented feel. Referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be smoother to improve the overall progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task. There are attempts to use less common items like 'detrimental effects', 'un-touched', and 'captivating', which demonstrate a reasonable range. However, there are several instances of awkward collocation and word choice, such as 'fatal conditions' instead of 'fatal consequences', and 'litter could be enter' (grammatical error affecting lexical clarity). The repetition of terms like 'normal trips' and 'natural locations' suggests a need for a wider variety of synonyms to express ideas with more precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('this types of trips', 'climate chances'), incorrect preposition usage ('in this conditions'), and sentence fragments ('Which is responsible for...'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are persistent throughout the text. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed with accurate subordinate clauses.

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