Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Man kind is being advanced and look for extra ordinary ways to plan their trips for their entertainment, specially to trips of places where survival is so challenging. The subsequent paragraphs will explore the benefits and drawbacks of visiting to low survival condition lands, with particular emphasis on its broader implications.

Looking forward to positive side, people visit constantly to these areas to get mental and physical relaxation, which they can get while diverting their mind and body to diverse situation and activities. For instance, people who are working in multinational companies located in metropolitans, feel a lot of stress of their work on there mind as well as on body and to reduce it, they plan their group trips towards mountains where the temperature do reach to extreme low, so they can feel differ environment and its conditions where they could do other adventures activities, which can realise them relax and it’s seems commonly.

Moreover, a lot of people like to learn about those who live in difficult living conditions, which trigger them to visit to those places and this led them to feel the same as their native can feel while living there.

On the other hand side, number of visitors are already lost their lives, just to visiting to those places which are too challenging to survive. For example, people those who go to deserts where the temperature is extremely high, people are failed to maintain the water level of their body and lost their lives because of dehydration. Furthermore, people do stuck into some issues about which they are unaware as like climate change or other some of the natural disasters.

To conclude it, visit is not a bad thing, even into the unfamiliar condition, but it should be done while doing proper planning that people can feel safe also, while travelling.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both the benefits and disadvantages of visiting challenging environments. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the benefit of 'mental relaxation' is mentioned, but the explanation is repetitive and lacks depth. Similarly, the disadvantages are touched upon, such as dehydration and natural disasters, but the examples provided are generic. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific, well-developed examples and ensure that your arguments are fully explored rather than just stated. The position is clear, but the overall depth of the response is consistent with a band 5.5 or 6.0 level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'On the other hand side', and 'To conclude it'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'On the other hand side' (which should be 'On the other hand'). Additionally, some sentences lack smooth transitions, making the flow feel a bit disjointed. Referencing is generally clear, but the progression of ideas could be more sophisticated to improve the overall coherence of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'low survival condition lands', 'realise them relax', and 'it’s seems commonly'. These errors occasionally impede the flow of the text. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the lack of flexibility and the presence of errors in collocation suggest a band 5.5 level. Focusing on more natural collocations and precise terminology would significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include 'Man kind is being advanced and look for', 'people who are working... feel a lot of stress of their work on there mind', and 'people do stuck into some issues'. These errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement, prepositions, and verb tenses, are noticeable. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy.

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