Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.
What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In this modern era, people are keen to travel all around the world and know about different cultures which results in boost to the tourism industry . Along with travelling there is a growing interest in adventurous activities such as sky diving, trekking ,exploring unexplored places and many more. The above notion has both positive and negative effect on travellers which I have supported in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To commence with advantages first and foremost is
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required 250-word minimum, containing only 76 words. Because the essay is incomplete and stops abruptly after the introduction, it fails to address the prompt's requirements for discussing both benefits and disadvantages. The ideas are not developed, and the task is not fulfilled. According to the IELTS criteria, a response that is severely under-length and fails to develop the required arguments cannot be awarded a score higher than a 4.0, as it does not provide a sufficient basis for evaluation of the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is too brief to demonstrate a logical progression of ideas or effective paragraphing. While the introductory paragraph attempts to set up a structure, the essay ends before any body paragraphs can be developed. There is a basic attempt at cohesion with phrases like 'To commence with', but the lack of content prevents the evaluation of cohesive devices or paragraphing skills. The structure is essentially non-existent due to the incomplete nature of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is functional but limited. Phrases such as 'modern era', 'keen to travel', and 'boost to the tourism industry' are standard and appropriate, but they do not demonstrate a wide range of vocabulary. There is no opportunity to showcase less common lexical items or precise collocations due to the extremely short length of the response. The vocabulary is sufficient for the few sentences written, but it does not meet the requirements for a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammar in the provided sentences is generally accurate, with simple and compound structures used correctly. For example, 'The above notion has both positive and negative effect on travellers' is grammatically sound, though 'effect' should be pluralized. However, the range of structures is limited, and the response is too short to demonstrate the ability to use complex sentence forms consistently or accurately. The errors present are minor, but the lack of length restricts the assessment of grammatical range.
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