Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.
What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is true that, nowadays a lot of visitors visit to some places like the Shara desert and the Antarctic where the situation is good good. However, there are some factors of this statement, and the ideas will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
To commence with, there are few issues of this trend. The first and the foremost reason is that, the majority of people are going to that places, because that places is very noise free, pollution free and peace that is why at that places people can feel relax and enjoy their holidays. Apart from this, that places such as the Shara desert and the Antartic is related to any history or example for human's life.
Nevertheless, there are some ideas for this phenomenon. Firstly, a numerous people living in different countries and different parts of the world and they can enjoy their favourite weather and season throughout the that places. To exemplify it, like more people want to go at cold places in summer to spend their vacation so, the Antartic is good places for ot and some people want to go in hottest places in the winter, then they can go to the Sharara desert to enjoy this. However, on the other side it is adverse for people, because when people enjoy that thing then they can spent a lot of money on it, like NRI people spent more money to buy aeroplan tickets, cloths etc.
In conclusion, although there are few reasons and advantages as well as disadvantages of this phenomenon due to aforementioned paragraphs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both benefits and disadvantages, but the development is quite limited and often unclear. For example, the explanation of why people visit these places (noise-free, pollution-free) is somewhat repetitive, and the points regarding 'history' or 'human life' are vague and lack logical connection to the prompt. The discussion of disadvantages focuses primarily on the cost of travel, which is a relevant point, but the argument is underdeveloped. The position is not clearly maintained throughout, and the conclusion is incomplete, failing to summarize the main points effectively. To improve, you should provide more specific, well-reasoned examples and ensure each paragraph has a clear, focused argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay uses basic cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Nevertheless', and 'In conclusion', but these are often used mechanically or inappropriately. The logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by unclear phrasing and grammatical errors, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks coherence. Referencing is often confusing, such as the use of 'that places' throughout the text, which creates ambiguity. To achieve a higher score, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each sentence flows logically from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'situation is good good', 'noise free', and 'hottest places'. The student relies on basic vocabulary and struggles to express more complex ideas accurately. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'Shara' (Sahara), 'Antartic' (Antarctic), 'aeroplan' (airplane), and 'cloths' (clothes). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the topic with any precision. To improve, you should work on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to travel and environment, and pay closer attention to the correct spelling and usage of common words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'that places is'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are awkward or incomplete, such as 'the ideas will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs' (which is a generic filler) and the final sentence, which is a fragment. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.