Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.
What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the contemporary era , people are traveling one place yo another place for adventures , peace . Thus , citizens going to that nation where the conditions are very rough or tough.
Its debatable issue in these day . lets discuss advantage and cons for tourists in upcoming paragraphs .
On the one hand , those people are going to these tough place has more benefits .The principle benefit is that they can earn money or they will generate the more money through the " You tube". For instance , a youtuber from India , his name is Ranbir , he is going to the most remote place like Desert . he is earning money from this travel because he broadcast the deferent video and how he surviving from these soils . Moreover , people are chose these kind of destination because they have to examine the power of self .
On the other hand those people are selecting these type of places they have facing many danger challenge some time they have loose their life during the visit of theses kind of places . For example , Sahara desert is very danger place because of the hot and water . A report revel by BBC that data showing that one third people died because of the water and the temprature in the desert . Apart from this , The Antarctic is one of the coldest place in the world . This place still need some attention to know .
In conclusion , although there are some disadvantage of going to these kind of place however , it provide significant and unquestionable advantage of going to there . Thus , i am convinced that their are more advantage outweigh the disadvantages .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both the benefits and disadvantages of visiting extreme environments. However, the development of ideas is limited. The benefit mentioned (earning money via YouTube) is somewhat narrow and does not fully explore the broader appeal of such travel, such as personal growth or scientific interest. The disadvantages are mentioned, but the explanation is hampered by unclear examples, such as the reference to a BBC report which lacks clarity. While a position is stated, the supporting arguments lack depth and the overall development is superficial, which is characteristic of a Band 5 response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. While cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion' are present, they are used in a somewhat formulaic manner. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the progression of ideas within paragraphs is disjointed. The lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive sentence structure make the text feel somewhat disjointed, limiting the score to a Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'rough or tough' instead of 'harsh', 'loose their life' instead of 'lose their lives', and 'deferent video' instead of 'different videos'. The student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary, but the inaccuracies often impede the clarity of the message. The range is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely, keeping the score at a Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are often marred by grammatical errors. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people are chose'), article usage, and tense consistency. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
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