Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In today's era , most of the individuals have a thrill to explore natural places like with difficult conditions such as a Antarctic and many more . Although this following trend have several benefits for pupils , instead of just advantages it also offer some disadvantages . Both will be mentioned in upcoming paragraphs before forming the last statement .

To begin with , there are a plethora of advantages of explore dangerous natural places . The primary one is that by visiting those tourist attractions people get a different kind of experience and be aware about the skills for survival in bad environment . Moreover , they will get a chance to be connect with wildlife and the creatures of the particular place . In spite of the personal growth of the individuals , it also create a job opportunities for the local people of the tourist place . For example , for visiting and to the enjoy the environment tourist need one guider and one person who will help them for the crucial things that should be carry and keep for their safety .

On the other hand , the stated trend also have some drawback for both the environment and for the people who like to visit places which have difficult conditions . Firstly , places like Antarctic and large forests has extreme hot and cold weather which can easily effect the health of individuals . In addition to this , people some time also face life threating problems like a infections , attack by wild animals and fall from large mountains . Apart from that , it also put the financial burden on folks by covering the expenses of living and consume a lot of time for the visa requirements and other paper works . Last but not least , due to visiting by number of visitors wildlife is also effected and disturbed , it also rise the problem of pollution in natural places .

In conclusion , although places with difficult conditions provide numerous benefits to the individuals like act as stress buster , chance to connect with nature and improvement in their knowledge relating to nature and wild animals , the downside like pollution , health and life risk is can not be over looked .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt (benefits and disadvantages). The ideas are relevant, such as personal growth and job creation for benefits, and health risks and environmental damage for disadvantages. However, the development is somewhat superficial. For example, the point about 'survival skills' is mentioned but not explained in detail. The position is clear throughout, but the introduction is slightly awkward in its phrasing ('pupils' is used incorrectly to mean tourists/people). To reach a higher band, you should aim to expand on your examples with more specific detail rather than listing several points briefly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand', which help the reader follow the argument. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly misused, such as 'In spite of the personal growth of the individuals' which does not logically connect to the following clause about job creation. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the concluding sentence is a bit run-on. Overall, the progression of ideas is coherent, but the management of cohesive devices could be more natural and precise.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward word choice or incorrect collocations, such as 'have a thrill to explore' (should be 'a desire/urge'), 'pupils' (used incorrectly for tourists), and 'guider' (should be 'guide'). Some phrases are repetitive, and there are minor errors in word forms, such as 'life threating' instead of 'life-threatening'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and the errors occasionally draw attention to the language rather than the content.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('this following trend have', 'places... has'), article usage ('a Antarctic'), and prepositional errors ('connect with wildlife'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and article rules would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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