Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays many visitors explore the places where conditions are extremely hard. One of them is Sahara desert. As people like to explore new areas and wants to learn something from there. However, those city always face problem with supply. This essay will discuss both pros and cones with valid conclusion.

On one hand, tourist like to experience different places in compare to their hometown. The places like Antartic and deserts provide emmence beauty by presenting their calming nature and adventures vibe. which lacks in their own city. For instance, pupil travel to warm desert for riding ATV bikes and to watch ratel snake. Moreover, some places have specific animals which are unavailabe to see them live. As Antartic has species like penguins and white bears which people thrive to see them in real situation.

On other hand, some areas are very critical and can be harsh for the survival. There is always limited supply for food and health care which makes tough option for visitors to live. For example, man can be dead if they donot receive proper medication for their heart problems due to shortage of supply. In addition, very less humans like to visit those places as weather conditions are unpredictable and in that case if they need help its very hard to find someone. To illustrate, If person gets stuck in icy mountain there is very rare chance that they can get any help as very less population prefers to live in those areas.

To conclude, people gets thrill by visiting extreme conditions and can explore different areas which they lack in their country. However, there is always a limited supply of food and healthcare which would be life threteaning if somne is in danger. As very less people live there because of limited opportunities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The essay addresses both the benefits and disadvantages of visiting extreme environments. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the mention of 'ratel snake' (honey badger) and 'white bears' (polar bears) is slightly inaccurate or vague, and the explanation of why people visit these places could be more deeply explored. The position is clear throughout, but the arguments lack the depth required for a higher band. The conclusion is a bit repetitive of the main body points rather than synthesising them effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On one hand', 'Moreover', and 'To illustrate', which help the flow of the text. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and there are instances where referencing is slightly unclear, such as 'those city always face problem' in the introduction, which does not clearly link to the preceding sentence. Overall, the progression of ideas is coherent, but the use of cohesive devices could be more natural and varied.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several spelling errors ('Antartic', 'emmence', 'threteaning', 'somne') and awkward collocations like 'man can be dead' and 'very less humans'. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary, the range is limited, and the errors occasionally distract the reader. To reach a higher band, the student needs to focus on accurate spelling and more natural word choices.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('people gets thrill', 'tourist like to experience'), article usage, and sentence fragments (e.g., 'which lacks in their own city'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent throughout the text. The student needs to focus on basic grammatical accuracy and proofreading to ensure that complex structures are formed correctly.

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