Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.
What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is widely acknowledged fact of jet set age that mostly echelons love to travel along the visiting sites which are not good in circumstances like Sahara desert and the Antarctic.Although The given statement has its own advantages and disadvantages,however,the benefits can not be eclipse with the mitigations.
Visiting the difficult places has some disadvantages,the first one is,the weather conditions make it more worst to travel when people decide to visit such places.Its hard to find any restaurant or the hotel to live and masses have to arrange their own tents .The weather is unpredictable over there ,its hard to m get shelter.Moreover,the cost of visiting such tourist places is very high.They have to buy tickets to enter which is too expensive.
Although,the given statement has some demerits ,however ,its merits can not be overlooked.Firstly,due to workaholism ,there is a gap between the family members which is the main cause of the broken realtionships and these kind of tours give them some time to have a breath from hectic schedule and have a quality time with the family members which helps to consolidate the relationships.Visiting these kind of placves makes our county's economy more strong because these places are costly to visit,more visitirs means more income to the country.A survey is conducted in 2018 in India,which shows because of the increasing popularity among tourism to visit difficult places,boosts the economy by 70%,which is 20 %before.
To recapitulate,according to my vantage point the scenario has both losses and profits .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the benefits and disadvantages of visiting difficult tourist destinations such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. The writer explores negative aspects like unpredictable weather, lack of infrastructure, and high costs, alongside positive aspects such as escaping hectic schedules to bond with family and boosting the local economy. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and the position is occasionally obscured by awkward phrasing. Furthermore, as noted in the length check, the essay falls one word short of the 250-word minimum requirement, which must be penalised under Task Achievement. These factors restrict the score to a 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay displays some overall organization with clear paragraph breaks separating the introduction, disadvantages, advantages, and conclusion. However, progression is disrupted by mechanical and faulty cohesive devices, such as incorrect punctuation around transition words (e.g., 'Although,the given statement...'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and sentences are often bolted together with commas rather than properly linked. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal flow of ideas lacks smooth transitions. This corresponds to the Band 5 descriptor, where organisation is present but cohesive devices are inadequate, inaccurate, or over-used.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The writer attempts less common vocabulary, such as 'echelons', 'workaholism', 'consolidate', and 'vantage point', but these are frequently used with unnatural collocation or inappropriate style (e.g., 'mostly echelons love to travel'). There are noticeable word-choice errors, such as 'more worst' instead of 'worse', 'placves' for 'places', and 'county's economy' for 'country's economy'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic message, the frequent lexical errors and strained phrasings limit the score to a 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay displays a limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on over-extended complex attempts that fail due to poor punctuation and grammar. Frequent errors occur in basic structures, articles, and word forms, such as 'benefits can not be eclipse with the mitigations' and 'a survey is conducted in 2018... which shows... boosts the economy'. Punctuation is weak throughout, with missing spaces after commas and periods. These persistent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, aligning the grammar score firmly with Band 5.
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