Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, people are excited to visit the places where normal crowd doesnot even think in dreams. It is commonly seen that tourists prefer the places which are not favourable for normal man. This essay will discuss both merits and demerits of visiting such a challenging location.

The major advantage of travelling to such dangerous locations to gain knowlegde about that place and explore new things because they have already read alot of things about that place so they want to get more deep knowlegde about it when can be only possible if they persnally visit there. For example, the researchers who want to perform certain research they will visit and definitely bring something which will be useful for humans. Through this way they figure about something that can be gain form certain places which not only help human but flora and fauna also. Moreover, visiting certain places help the person to enhance its growth as he need to face a lot of challenge and make the quick decision according the situation in front of it and finally after tackling those person become intelligent and confident in his life.

There are many assoiciated with certain decision. Firstly, the safety risk as the nature of the environment is not suitable and unpredicitable one may need to face challenges such as temperatures and health condition. For example if person faces some health concerns then tere isnot any such health facilities the person can avail which can cure him on that time. Secondly, the higher cost, the people who travel to such locations need to spend high amount of their safety equipments and transporation as they are not generally available.

In my opinion, it is better to visit only that location which suits you well else if one needs to try for these location then every preventive measures should be taken so that there should not be any chance where the person would regret upon his decision later.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both the benefits and disadvantages of visiting challenging locations like the Sahara or Antarctica. The position is clear throughout the essay, beginning with the introduction and concluding in the final paragraph. Ideas are presented and supported with examples, such as researchers gaining knowledge and exploring nature, as well as the safety risks and high costs involved. However, some ideas are a bit repetitive and under-developed, lacking full elaboration. For example, the mention of personal growth could have been linked more explicitly to the physical challenges of extreme environments. Overall, the task is answered satisfactorily, fitting well within the expectations of Band 6.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay has a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphs fulfilling distinct functions, such as an introduction, a body paragraph for benefits, a body paragraph for disadvantages, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used to signal logical relationships, such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Moreover'. However, cohesion is sometimes faulty or mechanical, and referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in the sentence 'There are many assoiciated with certain decision', which lacks a noun after 'many'. The transition between ideas can feel abrupt, and pronouns are sometimes ambiguous, which places this response comfortably in the Band 6 descriptor category for this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items such as 'favourable', 'challenging location', 'flora and fauna', and 'safety equipments'. However, there are notable lexical errors and spelling mistakes throughout the text, including 'doesnot', 'knowlegde', 'alot', 'persnally', 'gain form', 'assoiciated', and 'unpredicitable'. These inaccuracies reflect a limited control of word formation and spelling. While communication is not severely impeded, the frequency of slips keeps the score at a Band 5.5, showing an intermediate command where vocabulary choice lacks precision and full control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating attempts at subordination and relative clauses, such as 'tourists who visit such places' and 'people who travel to such locations need to spend high amount'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement, missing articles, and awkward phrasing, such as 'the people who travel to such locations need to spend high amount of their safety equipments', 'there isnot any such health facilities', and 'according the situation in front of it'. Punctuation is also weak in places, leading to run-on sentences. These errors occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar at a Band 5.0 level.

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