Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.
What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Nowadays, People are more interesting in tour. They are searching a unique places for the travelling. Travelling is most popular for the many countries because people are disconnet with friends and sometime it has been connect with travelling, climbing, scuba-dywing, revercrafting makes a new activity for the gettogethering. So it has many advantages of face to face talking and sometime give a time for more days with connection in good and very important for the world is best friendships.
Today, In Many countries like changs for the tourists places, Because people are bad habitual use their places condtion for the eating foods, some unvevering situations creates. That is the reason most affect such as Sahara desert and The antrarctic, Those two places are very dump and dirty conditions made for the tourism person. Some times social media like instagram, Facebook, Snapchat, Whatsup It is barrier for the discontinued area.
While, The tourists more Influences for the searching and finding and sharing information for the good visiting areas. It has many advantages for the clearance what is the next location. Some Tourists are very clever, His idea for more guidence for the searching unique place for wether condition. If ,without tourists you do not campaining and correct location. He has a atlas, maps, telescope and diretion for the Different equipments. So He is very helpful for the bad condition.it is a good benefits and very well advantages for the normal person.
Sometime, connection live for the some location, that time creation a bad situation and not helping any person. It is disadvantage for our priority. The tourists have been signing for your form. So, Do not bleming to him for awareness.
Hence, I give my relevant example for the some conditions are difficult and affect the more with tourists. I know it is very difficults but explaination is more important for the guidener and such places.
My opinion Connect with my knowledge or experience, it is says people are visiting places very bad conditions so please change thinking for the many more current situations.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding the benefits and disadvantages of visiting difficult tourist places like the Sahara or Antarctic, but the ideas are largely undeveloped and unclear due to severe language barriers. The writer mentions some points about social media, equipment, and bad conditions, but the overall position and arguments are difficult to follow. The connection between the ideas and the specific advantages or disadvantages is often obscured by broken syntax and tangential thoughts. Consequently, the task is only addressed in a limited and confusing way, aligning with the Band 4 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
Information and ideas are not arranged coherently throughout the response. Although paragraph breaks are used, the internal progression within paragraphs is illogical and disjointed. Sentences like 'Today, In Many countries like changs for the tourists places...' lack basic logical links and fail to build a cohesive argument. Reference words and cohesive devices are either missing, misused, or inaccurate, making it extremely hard for the reader to follow the flow of thought from one sentence to the next. The overall structure reflects Band 4 characteristics.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and often misused, which severely impedes communication. The writer frequently invents or distorts words, such as 'gettogethering', 'unvevering', 'revercrafting', and 'bleming'. Collocations are unnatural and word choice errors are pervasive throughout the essay, for instance, 'bad habitual use' or 'dump and dirty conditions'. There is no evidence of a sufficient range of vocabulary for the task, meaning the response falls squarely into the Band 4 category for lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak, with a very limited range of sentence structures. Almost every sentence contains major grammatical errors, including severe issues with verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, word order, and sentence fragments (e.g., 'If ,without tourists you do not campaining and correct location.'). Punctuation is also heavily misused with random capitalisation and comma splices. Because errors are frequent, pervasive, and often distort the intended meaning, the grammar warrants a Band 4 score.
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