Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.
What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, Many visitors are visiting the places, where it is extreme hard to survive, places like Sahara Desert or Antarctic. People need to understand and look more reliable way to go such places. I will provide more demerits and a benefit to explain the situation.
First of all, there is a pessimistic side is allergic conditions during summer season. Mostly too many families are visiting to sahara desert during the month of may, which feels more heat and resulting into the reactions to thier skins and faces. In addition to this, they may suffer from not only vomatting but also from headache.
Secondly Antarctic is the coldest place we can seen during nowadays. Visitors are more often visit during winters to feel the best scenario and beautiful landscapes. For example, An Archaelogical survey shows that, 80% of the mankind have the cold problems and paralysis while visiting such places. Doctors are also advising to avoid such places.
On the Opposite side, there are benefits too. Firstly the students who are exploring such places will get to know more about the History and they get ample amount of skills and knowledge. For example, nowadays while students who are attending schools will get advise from their professors to visit the historical places like Burj Khalifa, Taj mahal to get informations regarding their materials which has used to built and how ancestors had made the construction in a tremendous manner.
In Conclusion, there are more disadvantage rather than the advantage. but Government can make the solution to come out with that problem and people can enjoy by visiting there.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the benefits and disadvantages of visiting extreme environments like the Sahara Desert and the Antarctic. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and uneven. For instance, the discussion on the disadvantages mentions 'allergic conditions' and health issues, but these points are slightly confused and lack clear supporting examples. Furthermore, when discussing the benefits, the student introduces examples such as 'Burj Khalifa' and 'Taj Mahal', which are neither extreme environments nor relevant to the specific context of the Sahara or Antarctic. Consequently, the position and ideas are only partially developed, aligning best with a band 5 score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs with basic cohesive markers such as 'First of all', 'Secondly', and 'In Conclusion'. However, the overall progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by logical leaps and irrelevant information, particularly in the body paragraphs. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is often faulty or mechanical. Referencing is also unclear at times, such as the sudden shift from extreme cold environments to urban tourist attractions in the benefit section. This level of organization and cohesive control reflects the descriptors for a band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and collocation. Examples include phrases like 'extreme hard to survive', 'feels more heat', and 'cold problems', which sound unnatural. There are also spelling errors such as 'vomatting' and 'Archaelogical'. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary, the frequent inaccuracies and limited range mean the lexical resource struggles to reach beyond a band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The essay displays a very limited range of sentence structures, with frequent grammatical errors that often cause difficulty for the reader. Issues include awkward phrasing like 'Nowadays, Many visitors are visiting the places, where it is extreme hard', subject-verb agreement errors such as '80% of the mankind have', and incorrect article usage. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to distorted meaning in places. This performance aligns with the criteria for band 4.5, rounded to a band 5.
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