Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

nowadays visiting the specific places are common thing to do

numerous tourists are visiting certain attractions where the situation is not well like desert because they like difficults things to do and some visitor are

going to these destinations just because to know about the old people and time how they can servive in the typical areas in addition folks are also visits the antarctic for see teh large mountains of snow and they love to do hiking and scateboarding on them and in my point of veiw this is happening because of some discoveries channels and some social media as well so nowadays they love to watch the movies and flims about desert and antaractic and in real life are really want to visits that kind of places as well

there are so many advantages to visiting these kinds of places we can see the anciet life culture and also some people love to do some challenging things in their life like desert safari ,on the other hand there are several drawbacks of attending these types of places which person dont know how to survive in hot desert and cold antarctic he can kill himself in hard conditions few months ago i lisitened a news of tv about the tourists which are killed just because of extreme cold in antarctic they didnot prepared themselves for cold weather and didnot have winter cloths as well

conclusion ; a large number of tourists are just like to visits the specific kinds of places because its amazing to having ourselves their but we have to prepare ourselves first

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the question: the benefits include experiencing ancient ways of life and taking on challenges, while the disadvantages include the danger of extreme heat and cold. The example of tourists dying in Antarctica also supports the risk you describe. However, the benefits are only briefly stated, and the discussion does not clearly explain how visiting these places benefits tourists beyond seeing scenery or seeking adventure. The opening focuses heavily on why people choose these destinations, rather than developing the requested benefits and disadvantages. Your conclusion gives a general recommendation to prepare, but does not clearly summarise both sides. Develop each main idea with a specific explanation or example, and make your overall position clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure, with an opening, a paragraph discussing advantages and disadvantages, and a concluding statement. Some linking expressions, such as “in addition” and “on the other hand,” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the opening is one very long paragraph, and the main discussion combines both sides without clearly separating or sequencing them. Several ideas run together, making the progression difficult to follow; for example, the discussion moves from ancient culture to hiking, media, safari, and then survival risks. Use distinct paragraphs for benefits and drawbacks, and organise each around one main point. Shorter sentences and clearer references would make the connections between ideas easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “challenging,” “extreme cold,” “desert safari,” and “survive,” so the reader can identify the main subject and risks. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “places,” “visits,” and “kinds of places.” Some choices are inaccurate or unclear, such as “difficults things,” “attending these types of places,” and “having ourselves their,” which can make the meaning harder to understand. Spelling errors such as “antaractic,” “anciet,” and “survive” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of expressions for travel, exploration, and environmental hazards, and check spelling and collocations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, and there are some simple clauses that communicate the main points, such as the statement that tourists may die in extreme conditions. However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries sometimes obscure meaning. For example, “some visitor are going” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “folks are also visits” combines incompatible verb forms. The opening paragraph contains several clauses joined without clear punctuation, and the conclusion’s “a large number of tourists are just like to visits” is grammatically unclear. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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