Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There is an ongoing debate over whether people should visit places which have dangerous conditions. Everything has it's pros and cons as it offers certain advantages with some limitations.

First and foremost, people want to experience different things in their life just becuase of that reason they prefer to visit verity of places. This things motivate them to explore more and visit every corner of the world. Exploring places like sahara desert and antarctic gives chance to find something new that might they read or watch on online plateforms only. This approach allows to experience the things which rarely available anywhere else. For example, sahara deserts have certain kinds of spicies that is the only place to observe them. Therefore, people who have hunger to know something new are often part of this trend.

On the other hand, there is more disadvntageous of this approach as compare to benefits of it. Firstly, this kinds of places are offer very uniquie environment to explore, and nature is as dangerous as beautiful. Although, it offers scenetic views, unknown challenges are always there. For example, movies always present cute looks of beers, while they are comes under the list of most human hunted animal. It is therefore having proper knowledge of particular place and prevention of upcoming problems would help to explore this kind of places. However, it is still filled with secrets.

To conclude, whilst visiting such places offers unique experience to individuals, the hidden problems are real obstacle. People might get died because of critical weather conditions. I believe that it is better to have tourist guide for particularly this kind of places, where everything is unpredictable.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the question: the benefit of discovering unfamiliar places and the risks of dangerous environments. The examples of observing unusual species and facing wildlife or severe weather are relevant. However, the discussion remains general and some points are not fully explained. For instance, you mention that tourists can “find something new,” but do not clarify what this experience offers them beyond novelty. The disadvantages focus mainly on danger, while practical consequences such as injury, isolation, or the difficulty of rescue could make the answer more complete. Your conclusion gives a clear recommendation to use a guide, but the overall position could be stated more directly and supported throughout with fuller explanations and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for benefits and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “First and foremost,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the move from exploring new places to the example of species is abrupt, and the sentence about bears does not clearly connect to the point about preparation. Some transitions are also mechanical, and references such as “this approach” and “this kinds of places” are not always precise. To improve, organise each body paragraph around one main idea, explain it, and then connect the example explicitly to that idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “conditions,” “environment,” “scenic views,” “unpredictable,” and “critical weather conditions.” These choices show an effort to discuss both attraction and risk. However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make parts of the response difficult to read, such as “verity,” “plateforms,” “spicies,” “disadvntageous,” and “human hunted animal.” Some phrases are also imprecise, including “hunger to know something new” and “cute looks of beers.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for hazards and benefits would help you explain the topic clearly without relying on broad phrases such as “something new” or “problems.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast clause beginning “Although” and a concluding “whilst” clause. However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors affect clarity. For example, “Everything has it's pros and cons” has an incorrect possessive form, while “this kinds of places are offer” combines incompatible subject and verb forms. In “they are comes under the list,” the verb construction is also incorrect. Articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries need attention; the opening paragraph, for example, joins two complete ideas with a comma. Practise building accurate sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking that each subject has a correctly formed verb and that punctuation separates complete ideas.

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