Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Mostly tourists are visiting places where conditions are so critical, such as Antarctica. I think tourists should not go difficult sides. They could face many problems. There are so dangerous situation for visitors. They can lost of their life.

Firstly, visitors go another dangerous places with their family. When they visit different areas. They know about more information. Some tourists like to face adventures in their life. They also explore their beauty, nature and attraction. They like to visit difficult places. For example, In murree sides especially in winter season. There are Snowfall, rain and land sliding. Snow block the paths. But mostly tourists want to visit adventure place. They take pictures, and videos in their cameras or mobile phone.They enjoyed a lot.

Secondly, when tourism go critical places. They face different obstacle. They just go visit for taking selfies and videos. But it not suitable for them. In Antarctica, visitors effected by glaciers, and rocks.when its break in a piece then it has bad impact on tourists. Some people lost their life in dangerous places. It destroy to tourists cars. Moreover they just waste their time. When they visit adventure places.

Finally, tourists should visit to another places. There are nature and beautiful views rather than difficult places. They should explore the beauty of places. They should taking pictures, selfies, making videos in their mobile phone or camera. When they visit peaceful places then they know about their culture, tradition and beauty. They should go historical places because it gives more information about their history and languages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both benefits and disadvantages: adventure, scenery, and learning about places are presented as benefits, while danger, injury, and damage to vehicles are disadvantages. Your examples of winter conditions in Murree and glaciers in Antarctica help make the topic relevant. However, the response does not develop these ideas sufficiently, and the position is not fully clear: the opening says tourists should avoid difficult places, but much of the first body paragraph describes why they enjoy visiting them. The final paragraph recommends peaceful and historical destinations rather than weighing the benefits against the risks. To strengthen the response, explain each main point with a clear cause or consequence and maintain a consistent position while answering both parts of the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Finally” show an attempt to organise the discussion. However, progression between ideas is not always clear. The first body paragraph shifts from family visits to information, adventure, and Murree without explaining how these points connect. The second paragraph repeats the danger point, while the conclusion introduces historical places and culture rather than clearly summarising the discussion. Some sentence fragments, such as “When they visit different areas,” interrupt the flow, and references such as “it” in “it has bad impact” are unclear. Group related ideas together and use linking phrases to show contrast and cause more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “Antarctica,” “glaciers,” “land sliding,” “adventure,” and “historical places,” so the reader can understand the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate or repetitive, including “difficult sides,” “critical places,” and “explore their beauty, nature and attraction.” Repeated references to “pictures,” “videos,” and “selfies” also take space without adding much detail. Aim for more precise expressions for challenging environments, risks, and benefits, and check collocations and word forms. For example, describe the conditions as “harsh” and explain that visitors may encounter “hazards” or gain “first-hand experience” of remote landscapes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences, including a conditional idea about glaciers breaking apart. However, the range of structures is limited, and errors are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “They can lost of their life,” “when tourism go critical places,” and “They should taking pictures”; these show problems with verb forms and sentence construction. There are also incomplete sentences, such as “When they visit different areas,” and inconsistent control of articles, plurals, and punctuation. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and review verb patterns after modal verbs (“can lose,” “should take”) and in present-tense clauses. More accurate complex sentences would make your reasoning easier to follow.

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