Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, most of tourists like to explore those places where conditions are hardest, such as Shara desert or the Antarctic. I believe that people love to visit this kind of desitination because they want to enjoy unique and unforgettable experiences and merits is extreme weather conditions can be dangerous for tourists. I will explain these points in upcoming paragraphs.

To begin with benefits, tourists might be able to explore unique and unforgettable experience in their life by visiting in these type of places. Moreover, they may gain their knowledge about place how people are working, serviving,earning and culture for diversity or get idea to start any business. For example, there are numerous business running according to people's needs. As a result, individulas can help to grow these places by providing different services.

Some places are located near sea or mountains and weather is unpredictable which can be risky for tourists health and safety. Very high or low tempreature may be put serious impcat on health which can be take more time to become normal. For instance, international students come for study in Canada, United state of America and London. First few weeks they struggle with health due to the different weather condition and they have to take medicines or stay at home to be stay healthy. So, hey may require emergency medical treatment.

In conclusion,although visiting places with extreme weather conditions offers unique experiences and helps tourists build confidence, it also involves health risks. Therefore, tourists should make proper preparations before visiting such destinations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the question: the benefit is gaining unusual experiences and learning about local life, while the disadvantage is risk to health and safety. Your position is clear in the introduction and conclusion. However, the development is uneven and some points are not closely connected to tourists visiting extreme environments. The claim that visitors can “get idea to start any business” and help places grow through services is not explained, while the example about international students in Canada, the United States and London is less relevant than an example involving tourists in the Sahara or Antarctica. To strengthen the response, explain specific benefits and risks for these visitors and support each with a directly relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for benefits and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “To begin with benefits,” “For example,” and “In conclusion” helps readers follow the main sections. Overall progression is clear, but connections within paragraphs are sometimes mechanical or unclear. For instance, the move from learning about local culture to starting a business, then to providing services, is not fully explained. The example about students also interrupts the focus on tourists in difficult environments. Use linking phrases to show how each example supports its point, and make sure pronouns such as “they” have an unmistakable reference.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “unique and unforgettable experiences,” “unpredictable,” “health and safety,” and “emergency medical treatment.” These choices communicate the general ideas, but the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “Shara,” “desitination,” “serviving,” “tempreature,” and “impcat.” Phrases such as “explore unique and unforgettable experience” and “merits is extreme weather conditions” are also unnatural or imprecise. Build a more accurate set of topic-specific expressions and check spelling and collocations carefully; this will make your meaning clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including the relative clause “places where conditions are hardest” and the sentence beginning “Although visiting places with extreme weather conditions offers…”. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles and verb forms sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “most of tourists like” needs a different article pattern, while “which can be take more time” has an incorrect verb construction. The opening sentence also joins several ideas without a clear grammatical structure. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and checking each clause, especially when combining ideas with “because,” “which” and “although.”

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