Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this email to suggest you my personal feedback about big company intrested to spend perticular amount of money for a local children's sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts.

Firstly, this is very good opportunity for our kids that some one invested money behind them to develope their physical skills. As we know that, everyone can not afford everthing related to sport, because of lack of resources some talent do not get proper elevation. If someone sponser such talent than community, region and nation can get benifits by that player. So, such help everyone in many ways.

Briefly, after getting benifits from major company's fund, organizer can arrange open-air concert on wide-scale. Which will help society and region in term of entertainment. Organizers can arrange traditional and motivational programme in such events which will aware youngester with their history. Also, teenagers can show their acting, singing and dramatical skills on stage. which will help them to show their performance to public. Because of this they can get career opportunities in acting.

In my opinion, Company should spend its money behind kids training, sportwear, equipment and many more which can help them to polish their sports skill as well as other hidden talents.

I hope this feedback will help you as all aspect.

Thank you,

Mohammad

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you explain that sponsorship could help children develop physical skills and support talented players, describe the concerts’ entertainment and performance opportunities, and recommend funding the team. Your position is clear in “Company should spend its money behind kids training.” The benefits of sponsorship are relevant, but the claim that support could benefit the “community, region and nation” is broad and would be stronger with a specific example. The concert section includes several benefits, although it is more developed than the final recommendation, which could explain why sports sponsorship is preferable overall. The response also uses “Dear Sir” rather than the requested opening, “Dear Sir or Madam,” and calls the letter an “email”; use the specified letter format and greeting.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it moves from the benefits of sponsorship to the concerts and then to your recommendation. Paragraph breaks help the reader distinguish these main points, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Briefly,” and “In my opinion” make the progression visible. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “So, such help everyone in many ways” does not clearly link the preceding point to a specific benefit, while “Which will help society and region” is an incomplete sentence rather than a smooth continuation. The closing also shifts abruptly to “I hope this feedback will help you as all aspect.” Use complete sentences and clearer references, and add a conventional closing to make the letter feel more unified.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a range of relevant vocabulary, including “physical skills,” “resources,” “traditional,” “motivational,” and “career opportunities,” which helps communicate the main ideas. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “intrested,” “perticular,” “develope,” “sponser,” and “benifits” are examples. Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “invested money behind them,” “proper elevation,” and “spend its money behind kids training.” Choose more natural collocations and check spelling carefully. For instance, say that a company can “invest in young athletes” and “fund the children’s training.” More precise vocabulary would also help distinguish the practical benefits of sports sponsorship from the cultural and entertainment benefits of concerts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause in “because of lack of resources” and a conditional structure beginning “If someone…” This shows some range, and the main message is generally understandable. However, some grammatical errors affect clarity. “This is very good opportunity” needs an article, and “some talent do not get” has a number-agreement problem. The sentence beginning “Which will help society” is a fragment, and “which will help them” begins a new sentence with a lowercase letter after a full stop. There are also awkward sentence patterns, such as “So, such help everyone in many ways.” Review articles, subject–verb agreement, and sentence boundaries, and make sure dependent clauses are attached to complete main clauses.

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