Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to your request for public feedback regarding the proposed sponsorship of a local children's sports team or the organisation of two open-air concerts.

In my opinion, sponsoring the children's sports team would bring considerable benefits to the local community. Firstly, it would encourage youngsters to participate in physical activities, promoting a healthier lifestyle from an early age. Furthermore, being part of a sports team helps them to develop essential life skills such as teamwork, discipline, confidence, and leadership. Additionally, financial support from your company can help children with better equipment facilities, and more spacious places for practice.

On the other hand, open-air concerts will provide entertainment to the community. It will provide a refreshment from the boring routine to the individual worker. Apart from this, because of concerts, people will come from neighbourhood, and it will be beneficial for marketing of cafes and restaurants.

I strongly believe that your company should sponsor the children's sports team, as it is considerably more beneficial than open-air concerts. Your sponsorship to children's team will help the children to grow in athalet career.

I hope my feedback adds some value and helps you to take better decision.

Yours faithfully,

Ruchi Shah.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points and maintain a clear recommendation: the company should sponsor the children’s team. The benefits of sponsorship are explained through health, teamwork and personal development, while the concerts are linked to community entertainment and business for local cafés and restaurants. These relevant ideas are extended with some supporting detail, which makes the response effective. However, the comparison is somewhat general, and the final claim that sponsorship will help children develop an “athalet career” is not clearly explained. To strengthen the response further, develop the concerts’ benefits with a specific example and make the final justification more precise, such as explaining the lasting impact of supporting young people.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: an opening that states its purpose, separate paragraphs for the two options, and a concluding recommendation. Linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “Furthermore,” “On the other hand,” and “Apart from this” help guide the reader through the points. The recommendation is also easy to identify. Some connections are less smooth, however: “It will provide a refreshment…” follows “open-air concerts” but the singular pronoun makes the reference less clear, and the final paragraph repeats the sponsorship argument without adding much development. Use clearer references and connect the conclusion to the specific benefits already discussed to make the progression more cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “physical activities,” “healthier lifestyle,” “essential life skills,” “discipline,” and “financial support.” These choices communicate the main ideas clearly, and some phrases show an attempt to be precise. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “a refreshment from the boring routine,” “with better equipment facilities,” and “grow in athalet career.” There is also a spelling error in “athalet.” These do not prevent understanding, but they limit the naturalness and precision of the letter. Aim to use familiar collocations accurately—for example, “a break from routine” and “provide equipment and facilities”—before attempting more ambitious phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including the opening purpose clause and the sentence explaining how team participation develops life skills. Most sentences are understandable, and errors rarely obstruct the message. Some grammatical inaccuracies remain: “It will provide” does not agree clearly with the plural subject “open-air concerts,” and “people will come from neighbourhood” is missing an article or plural form. In “help children with better equipment facilities,” the grammatical relationship between the verb and the following phrase is unclear. To improve, check subject–verb agreement, articles and plural nouns, and revise sentences whose structure makes the relationship between ideas difficult to follow.

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