Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to share my feedback with you regarding the advantages of sponsoring money. First of all, investing money in sports will help numerous children. It will influence them to do more outdoor activities rather than enjoying sedentary lifestyle. For Example, children are just becoming robots in front of technology which leads to number of diseases but sports activities will help to mitigate it by imroving their health. Moreover, it will also create new player who will play for the country.

On the other hand, If organisation will sponser for open air concert, it will not help the public but also the company by improving its reputation. As open concert is kind of entertainment that opens door for new employment opportunities for youngster. For Instance, People will do job as a security guard, cashier for tickets, cleaner and many more. In addition, Company can promote various brands and create awareness around public.

I think company should spend money equally in both the sponsorships which will effectively assist public and company.

Your's Sincerely,

Dimpledeep Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: the letter explains how sports could benefit children, outlines advantages of concerts, and gives a recommendation. The sports section includes relevant outcomes such as encouraging outdoor activity, improving health, and potentially developing players for the country. The concert section also identifies employment and promotional benefits. Your recommendation to divide the money equally is clear, but it is not explained: briefly compare the two options or say why balancing community and company benefits makes this the best choice. Some claims, such as concerts not helping the public, also conflict with the benefits you then describe. More balanced, specific development would make the response more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an opening, separate paragraphs for the two options, and a concluding recommendation. Transitions such as “First of all,” “On the other hand,” and “Moreover” help readers follow the comparison. However, some linking is mechanical, and the relationship between ideas is not always smooth. For example, “On the other hand” introduces the concert benefits, but the claim that concerts “will not help the public” is immediately followed by examples of public employment. The final recommendation also arrives without a transition or supporting comparison. Use clearer references and connect each example directly to the point it supports to make progression more flexible and consistent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the topic, including “sedentary lifestyle,” “mitigate,” “reputation,” and “employment opportunities.” These choices show an attempt to use more specific vocabulary, although some are inaccurate or awkward in context: “sponsoring money” is not a natural phrase, and “create new player” does not express the intended idea clearly. There are also spelling errors, including “imroving,” “sponser,” and “For Example.” Aim for accurate collocations and consistent spelling and capitalisation. For instance, use “fund the team” or “sponsor the team,” and “develop future players.” This would make your meaning more precise while retaining the useful range you already demonstrate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “technology which leads to number of diseases” and a conditional structure in the concert paragraph. The main ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. Examples include “If organisation will sponser,” where the conditional form is faulty, and “it will not help the public but also the company,” which needs a parallel “not only … but also” construction. Articles and number also need attention in “a sedentary lifestyle,” “a number of diseases,” and “create new player.” Review conditional patterns and agreement, and proofread sentence boundaries and punctuation. More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen control.

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