Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my response on whether to sponser a local junior sports team for two years or to donate to open-air concerts.

The major benefits for funding the sports team is that it gives opportunities to local children, who do not get chance to participate in sports due to finacial issues. This offer has a good chance to support local children therefore they can represent our country on international lavel.

The another choice is for paying the concert is helps to support local council to reduce the finacial burdon so that they can utilize that funds on other sectors like healthcare, infrastucture many more.

I support use funding on sponsering the sport team as a result a team can get stronger and enhance their skills even much better. The regular practice and hardwork can make the team much better and they can represent the nation on international level and make the country more proud.

Thank you for your time and considering my suggestions.

Yours sincerely,

Ramandeep kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points and make your recommendation clear: you favour sponsoring the sports team. The benefits you give—providing children with access to sport and helping them develop their skills—are relevant, and you also identify a possible benefit of concerts by saying the funding could ease pressure on the local council. This covers the task well, while showing some of the fuller development expected at the next level. However, the concert benefit is less clearly explained: it is not made explicit how paying for concerts would reduce the council’s financial burden. The sports-team argument also repeats the idea of representing the country internationally rather than adding a distinct supporting reason. Explain each option’s benefits more precisely and support your recommendation with a clearer comparison.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: an opening states its purpose, separate paragraphs discuss the two options and your recommendation, and a polite closing completes the format. The reader can follow your main position. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, particularly in the final paragraph, where “as a result” and “and” connect several claims without showing their exact relationship. The phrase “therefore they can represent” also leaves the link between financial support and international representation under-explained. Use clearer transitions to distinguish immediate benefits from longer-term outcomes, and make references such as “that funds” more precise. This would make the connections between ideas smoother and less dependent on basic linking words.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “sponsoring,” “local children,” “open-air concerts,” and “represent our country.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions such as “financial issues” and “international level.” However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural collocations are noticeable, for example “sponser,” “finacial,” “international lavel,” and “the financial burden” misspelled as “burdon.” Phrases such as “the another choice” and “make the country more proud” are also not natural choices for this context. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your position, but more accurate spelling and conventional collocations would improve clarity and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “children, who do not get chance…” and a purpose clause beginning “so that.” The overall meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “The major benefits … is” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “The another choice is for paying the concert is helps” combines incompatible sentence structures. Articles are also missing in “do not get chance,” and the recommendation sentence beginning “I support use funding” is not grammatically complete. Aim to build each sentence around one clear main clause, check agreement and articles, and then add subordinate clauses where they fit. More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen the response.

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