Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
A big organization in our town has decided to support children sport team for two years or either they can support for two open air concerts. So they asked opnion of the local people.
According to view we should support for the children team for 2 year because they are the future of country and there is very less sport facilities.we can make playground for sports like running or make stadium for the cricket team.Due to lack of sport facilities many sport player in our country are unable to upgrade there skill at global level and when they participate in olympics we does gegt a gold medal.
on other hand, we does have the also there are some advantages to economy from building new concert like it gave boost to local small bussiness and we can bring supertar or singer.
Conclusion, we should provide support for children rather than the support for concert. the need of children sport team is more critical and urgent that is required to fufill as soon we can.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You give a clear preference for supporting the children’s team, and you identify relevant benefits such as improving sports facilities and helping young athletes develop. You also mention that concerts could attract performers and benefit local businesses. However, the two options are not covered equally: the concert benefits are only briefly stated, and the sports-team benefits need clearer explanation. The letter also lacks a suitable opening and closing, and the recommendation would be more persuasive if you explained why the company itself would benefit from supporting the team. Develop each required point with a specific, connected explanation so the response addresses all parts more fully.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a recognisable overall order: it introduces the choice, discusses the sports team, considers concerts, and ends with a recommendation. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the sports section, where facilities, skill development, and Olympic results are joined without clear links. The transition “on other hand” signals a contrast, but the concert discussion is too compressed to form a balanced section. Use clearer paragraphing and linking expressions, and make the relationship between each benefit and your recommendation explicit. A conventional letter opening and sign-off would also make the organisation more appropriate to the task.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “sport facilities,” “playground,” “stadium,” “local small business,” and “economy,” so the reader can identify the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts less clear, such as “opnion,” “supertar,” and “fufill.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “upgrade there skill” and “support for the children team.” Aim to use accurate, natural phrases for sponsorship and community benefits, and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you explain the advantages of both options without relying on repeated forms of “support” and “benefit.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, for example, “Due to lack of sport facilities many sport player… are unable to…” However, control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “they are the future of country,” “we does have the also,” and “when they participate in olympics we does gegt a gold medal.” These show problems with articles, subject–verb agreement, and sentence construction. There are also unclear sentence boundaries, especially where several ideas are joined together. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then connect them with a controlled range of clauses. Check agreement and articles before submitting, and use punctuation to separate complete ideas.
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