Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to share feedback on whether spending money on sports for two year is a good option or free concerts for student is a better choice.

Sponsoring the sports team would encourage children to perform well in the games. They will be able to focus on sports effectively without any hussle and bustle. Extra money allow council to hire a coach in order to improve team's performance.

The concert is a interesting choice for students who love to listen musics and attend parties. They are often very expensive so most of them would never had been gone, but your free tickets would allow them to meet their favourite musician and enjoy the concerts without any financial stress of the tickets.

From my perspective, sponsoring a sports team would be beneficial because it helps them to improve their fitness, strength and resilience. Moreover, our township also promoting fitness in recent years, so paying money in the same direction would get better result for the township.

Thank you.

Kind regards,

Vaibhav

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points and make your recommendation clear: you favour sponsoring the sports team because it supports fitness and aligns with the township’s recent focus. The sports benefits are relevant, including access to a coach and improved performance. You also explain that free concerts could let students see musicians they like without financial pressure. However, the concert benefits are developed more fully than the practical benefits to the wider community, while the sports case could use a specific example of how two years of support would help children. The letter is appropriately directed to the company, but the opening says “Dear Sir” rather than the requested “Dear Sir or Madam.” More balanced development and a little more support for your recommendation would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening states its purpose, separate paragraphs discuss the two options, and the final main paragraph gives your recommendation. This makes the response easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “because” to show how ideas relate. Some connections are less smooth, however. The shift from the concert paragraph to your recommendation is abrupt, and “From my perspective” could introduce a more explicit comparison with the concerts. References such as “them” in the final paragraph are not fully precise, as it could refer to the children or the sports team. A clearer transition and more exact referencing would make the progression more cohesive and less dependent on paragraph order alone.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the topic and includes relevant terms such as “sponsoring,” “coach,” “performance,” “fitness,” “strength” and “resilience.” These help communicate the main benefits of each option. You also attempt some less common expressions, but several choices or forms are inaccurate or unnatural, including “hussle and bustle,” “listen musics,” and “get better result.” “A interesting choice” also reflects an article-form issue rather than a vocabulary weakness. Aim for more natural collocations and accurate word forms: for example, say that children can “focus on training without distractions,” and that concerts let students “listen to music.” More precise phrasing would make your ideas sound more fluent and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, including a reason clause in “it helps them to improve their fitness” and a purpose clause in “in order to improve team's performance.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur across the letter. Examples include “for two year,” “Extra money allow,” “a interesting choice,” and “most of them would never had been gone.” These involve plural forms, subject–verb agreement, articles and verb construction. The final sentence, “our township also promoting fitness,” is missing an auxiliary verb. Review these patterns and check each sentence for a complete verb phrase and correct agreement. Greater accuracy in these areas, alongside your existing sentence variety, would make the letter more controlled.

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