Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I was pleased to hear that your organization has decided to spend an amount for the public. It is a great idea that you are considering folks feedback to invest your money.

In my perspective, sponsoring for the sports team can help the team to improve their infrastricture and equipments. Moreover, it will help them to grow at bigger level and help them to explore their talent in different sports.

Paying for Open-air concerts will serve a great source of entertainment to the locals. It is very rare that big events like these happen in cities. Mostly, concerts are arranged in the big cities due to which only certain population can enjoy them.

I believe, your organization should the money on local children's sports welfare. It will boost their confidence and can help us identify local talent at an early stage. They can polish their skills and can go on global level as with that money they can do so many things.

I would really appreciate if you take my feedback into accountability.

Yours faithfully,

Gaurav Kumar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points and make your recommendation clear: you favour supporting the children’s sports team. The benefits you give—improving facilities and equipment, developing young players, and identifying local talent—are relevant. You also explain that concerts would provide entertainment and bring large events to local residents. However, the concert benefits are less fully developed than the sports-team benefits, and some claims, such as the team reaching a “global level,” would be stronger with a clearer explanation of how the funding enables this. The letter is appropriately framed for a company, but the closing request could be more direct and polished. To strengthen the response further, develop each benefit with a specific, plausible example and make the recommendation’s reasoning more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear overall progression: an opening, a paragraph on each funding option, a recommendation, and a closing. This makes the main message easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “I believe” help signal how ideas relate. The paragraphing is appropriate and keeps the two options distinct. Some connections between ideas could be smoother, however. For example, the move from concerts being rare in cities to only certain people enjoying them is understandable but could be expressed more directly. The recommendation paragraph also repeats the idea of helping local talent without clearly separating the benefits. Use a few more precise links to show cause and effect, while avoiding unnecessary transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the topic, with relevant terms such as “sponsoring,” “entertainment,” “local talent,” and “confidence.” You also attempt more specific expressions, including “at an early stage” and “polish their skills.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “spend an amount for the public,” “sponsoring for the sports team,” and “take my feedback into accountability” do not express the intended meanings naturally. There are also spelling errors in “infrastricture” and “equipments.” Aim to learn common combinations such as “allocate funds to,” “sponsor a team,” and “take feedback into consideration.” More accurate phrasing would make your ideas sound clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the relative clause in “It is very rare that big events like these happen in cities” and the reason clause beginning “due to which.” Most sentences remain understandable, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. In “I believe, your organization should the money,” the verb “spend” is missing, and “I would really appreciate if you take” needs a more suitable clause pattern and verb form, such as “I would really appreciate it if you took.” The sentence “They can polish their skills and can go on global level” also needs an article and a more complete construction. Practise checking verb forms, articles, and sentence patterns, while retaining your attempts at complex structures.

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