Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to give a feedback on the subject of either sponsoring a local children's sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts.

Many local sports team lack adequate funding and often rely on money from the government or private companies like yours to keep their team running. It would be very beneficial to many youngsters in the community who are talented, if your organisation decides to sponsor one of the national sports team. The team will be able to afford professional coaches who can train the players effectively, offering them a chance at a better future.

On the other hand, paying for the concerts will give residents access to a free and entertaining show, which will serve as an avenue to relax and enjoy a memorable experience. The concert will also give local people the opportunity to meet their favorite artists or performers. Lastly, the outdoor event will encourage socialisation and interaction among community members.

To satisfy both needs, the company can divide the available resources by supporting a local sports team for one year and paying for one outdoor concert. I believe this approach will promote both sports and entertainment purposes.

I hope my suggestions are helpful.

Yours faithfully,

Mariam

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points and maintain a courteous, appropriate letter format. The benefits of sponsorship are explained through access to professional coaches and improved opportunities for young players, while the concerts are linked to free entertainment, meeting performers, and community interaction. Your recommendation is clear: divide the funding between a team and a concert. However, the task asks you to choose between sponsoring a team for two years and paying for two concerts; proposing one year of sponsorship and one concert changes the options rather than selecting one. The sports-team benefits are also less fully developed than the concert benefits. To strengthen the response, choose one of the stated options and explain why its benefits outweigh those of the alternative. (Sixteen words copied from the task prompt were excluded from the word count.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter is organised into clear paragraphs: an opening, a discussion of each option, and a recommendation. This gives the reader a coherent overall progression, and signposting such as “On the other hand” and “Lastly” helps distinguish the points. The closing is also appropriate. Some linking is a little mechanical, however, and the final paragraph’s “To satisfy both needs” does not fully resolve the choice presented in the task. The reference to “the team” is understandable, though the earlier description shifts from a local team to a “national” team, making the focus less consistent. For stronger cohesion, keep the same team and funding options throughout, and connect the recommendation explicitly to the benefits discussed.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a formal letter, including “adequate funding,” “professional coaches,” “memorable experience,” and “socialisation and interaction.” These choices communicate the main ideas clearly, and the tone is generally suitable. There are some imprecise or unnatural expressions: “give a feedback” is not the usual collocation, “sports team” is used where the plural is needed in the general statement, and “promote both sports and entertainment purposes” is awkward. “National sports team” also does not accurately convey the local focus of the prompt. Aim for more natural collocations and precise wording, especially when describing the company’s community support and the intended beneficiaries.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including the conditional “if your organisation decides to sponsor…” and the relative clause “which will serve as an avenue…”. Most sentences are easy to understand, and punctuation and paragraphing are generally controlled. Some grammatical errors remain. In “Many local sports team lack,” the plural subject requires “teams”; “a feedback” should be “feedback” without an article; and “either sponsoring … or to pay” uses mismatched forms, so use “either sponsoring … or paying.” The sentence beginning “It would be very beneficial to many youngsters … who are talented” is also awkwardly arranged. Review agreement, articles, and parallel structures to make your otherwise clear sentences more accurate.

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