Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to provide a feedback about yours donation towards local community. Your business unit is planining to construct facilities for youngster sports team or arrange two musical concerts for individuals.
If your company spend tremendous amount of money on general childrens sports groups for two years, it wil brings several benefit to youster lives as well as school premises. These days, parents are suffering monetary issues due to that they are not allowing their child to participate in sports team. Therefore, your donation will assists many children and improve their physical health.
Concerts are extremely crucial in humans lives as it enhance their bonding with other people and boost their sense of well-being. Nowadays, individuals facing various work isuses and it leads to stress and depression. Thus, if your company organise two musical programme, it will reduce many problem in individuals lives.
As per my perspective, you need to invest your money on development of children sports teams, as it is very crucial compared to concerts,
I look forward to receiving your prompt response
Yours faithfully,
Piyush
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly describe the benefits of the sports team, summarize the benefits of the concerts, and state your preference for the sports sponsorship. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited; for instance, the explanation of why parents struggle with sports costs is a bit brief. To reach a higher band, ensure that your arguments are more fully extended with specific examples or logical consequences. Overall, the task is fulfilled effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific requirement of the prompt. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Therefore,' 'Thus,' and 'As per my perspective' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing (e.g., 'due to that they are not allowing'). The progression of ideas is generally clear, but improving the variety of linking words would help the flow of the letter feel more natural and sophisticated.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'monetary issues,' 'well-being,' and 'development.' However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'provide a feedback' (should be 'provide feedback'), 'youngster sports team' (should be 'youth sports team'), and 'work isuses' (spelling error). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and common collocations to reach a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('it wil brings,' 'your company organise'), article usage ('on general childrens sports groups'), and pluralization errors ('many problem'). While the meaning remains clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and plural forms would significantly improve your accuracy.
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