Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing a later to you about to give a feedback to allocate the funds to sponsor the local children sport game and paying for two open air concerts.

There are really benefits of spending money for sports team. By this small efferts, children can gain interest towards sports activities because as thesedays they are spend their lesiure time on social media. If you give a way of playing it may be atracted children to indulge ourself in games.

If you sponser the open-air concert, it would be bring more happiness for citizens as it never happened before, so people may be enjoy singing, dancing and get a

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you have addressed the three bullet points—describing the benefits of the sports team, the concerts, and stating a preference—the ideas are underdeveloped and lack sufficient detail. For instance, the benefits of the concerts are cut off mid-sentence, and the conclusion is missing. To improve, you must expand on your arguments with specific examples or explanations to ensure the task is fully addressed. The current length is insufficient to demonstrate the ability to develop a coherent argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter has a basic structure with an opening and some paragraphing, but the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are limited and sometimes misused, such as the awkward transition 'By this small efferts'. The lack of a proper conclusion and the abrupt ending make the overall flow disjointed. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that you use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') to connect your ideas logically throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'benefits' and 'spending money'. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'later' instead of 'letter', 'efferts' instead of 'efforts', and 'atracted' instead of 'attracted'. These errors occasionally make the meaning slightly unclear. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'community engagement', 'physical well-being', or 'cultural enrichment', and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('children can gain interest... as thesedays they are spend'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain errors that impede the flow, such as 'it would be bring more happiness'. You need to work on basic sentence construction and verb tenses. Try to incorporate a mix of simple and complex sentences, ensuring that your subject-verb agreement and word order are accurate. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect verb forms is essential.

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