Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope this letter finds you in good health and high spirits. I am writing to giving feedback about use the fixed amount of money in various activities. I would like to provide some details regarding this matter and explain my thoughts on how company sponsor some events.

To begin with, sponsoring to sports team could have several benefits for local children. It would encourage them to participate in physical activities, develop teamwork and discipline , and maintain healthy lifestyle. Moreover, financial support could provide them better equipment, training staff and so on. This would give talented young players an opportunity to improve their skill and make a good career in their fields.

Furthermore, paying for two open air concerts would also benefit for residents. Such events could provide people with an opportunity to relax, enjoy the good music and spend time with their friends and family. In addition, concerts are help local shops and restaurant to getting more business.

Finally, I strongly believe sponsor a local sports teams is way better and gives higher return to the community. Unlike concerts are organized for few hours.

I hope you will take my suggestions into considerations. Thank you for giving local community a chance to express their views.

Your faithfully,

Nilesh Parghi.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You have described the benefits of the sports team sponsorship, summarized the benefits of the concerts, and clearly stated your preference. The ideas are relevant and logically developed. However, the development of the final point could be more sophisticated; for instance, you mention that the sports team gives a 'higher return' but do not fully explain why this is more valuable than the community-wide social benefits of concerts. Overall, the response is well-structured and fulfills the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'Finally' to guide the reader through your argument. While the flow is logical, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing, such as in the sentence 'Unlike concerts are organized for few hours', which lacks a clear connection to the previous thought. Nevertheless, the progression of ideas is easy to follow throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'physical activities', 'discipline', and 'community'. There are some instances of awkward phrasing or incorrect word choice, such as 'paying for two open air concerts would also benefit for residents' (should be 'benefit residents') and 'concerts are help local shops' (should be 'help local shops'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. To reach a higher band, focus on more precise collocations and avoid repetitive structures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb forms and prepositions, such as 'I am writing to giving feedback' (should be 'to give'), 'use the fixed amount' (should be 'using'), and 'sponsor a local sports teams' (should be 'sponsoring a local sports team'). Additionally, the closing 'Your faithfully' is incorrect (should be 'Yours faithfully'). While these errors are frequent, the meaning remains clear throughout the letter. Increasing your control over basic verb patterns and article usage will significantly improve your score.

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