Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir / Madam,

I hope you will finds this letter good health and high spirits. I write this letter for a large company in you area has decided to spend a certain amount of money .then either sponser a local children's sports team for two year . the benefits of sponsoring the sports provide steady physical mental and social growth for youth. then better fitness regular play build strong bones and health heart. Then active kids learn to daily movements from a young age. then summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts guranted official entry ,better crowd control , safe facilities clear line near the stage and high qualtily proffesional sounds. it also directly supports the artists and crew, makinf future possible tours. the company should spend the money more benefit of open air concerts

yours faithfully,

Balraj Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all three bullet points, but the development of ideas is limited and the letter is under the minimum word count requirement. The explanation of the sports team benefits is brief, and the section on concerts is presented as a list of features rather than a cohesive summary of benefits. Furthermore, the final recommendation lacks a supporting reason, which is necessary for a persuasive letter. Because the response is under the 150-word minimum, it fails to fully develop the required points, resulting in a lower score for task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks a clear paragraph structure, which makes it difficult to follow. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and often misused; for example, the word 'then' is used repeatedly at the start of sentences to link ideas, which is unnatural and does not serve as an effective transition. There is no clear introduction or conclusion beyond the salutation and sign-off. The lack of logical progression between the benefits and the final recommendation further hinders the flow of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and there are several spelling errors, such as 'sponser', 'guranted', 'qualtily', 'proffesional', and 'makinf'. These errors, combined with limited word choice, restrict the ability to convey ideas precisely. While the student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary related to sports and concerts, the overall range is insufficient to express complex ideas fluently. The repetition of simple structures and the reliance on basic descriptors prevent the response from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement ('I hope you will finds'), article usage, and sentence construction. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, such as the opening sentence which is run-on and grammatically incorrect. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There is little evidence of complex sentence structures, and the persistent errors in basic grammar significantly impact the clarity of the message.

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