Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to share the feedback of localities regarding the selection of spending money to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts.

Our community has a number of children who are athletic and utmost talented. The guardians arrange for low-scale cricket matches and the young athletes perform marvelously. However, children lack appropriate equipment and kits. if you sponsor the children's sports team for the next two year, the children will get opportunities internationally. Moreover, it can generate finances which will benefit the community and your company equally.

The people of our area works really hard to prosper every day. People ration to meet basic requirements. So, if you sponsor open-air concerts, it will be the perfect mood lifting activity for them as they are deprived of entertainment. The concert can be covered by news channel and social media pages which will benefit your company as well in terms of promotion. Not only this, but other companies may also collaborate with you further.

I have mentioned both sides with their positive outcomes. I would suggest you to choose to sponsor sports team for children as watching the game is also a form of entertainment and at the same time it is a healthy activity for the children. It can also benefit them in their future to build professional careers.

Kind regards,

Amal Hamid

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly described the benefits of the sports team sponsorship, summarized the advantages of the open-air concerts, and provided a clear recommendation for the company. Your tone is appropriate for a formal letter, and your position is consistent throughout the response. The ideas are relevant and well-developed, providing a logical flow from the description of the community's needs to your final suggestion. To reach a higher band, ensure that your arguments are slightly more nuanced; for example, you could briefly acknowledge the potential drawbacks of your chosen option to show a more balanced perspective.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each option, and a concluding recommendation. You use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'However', and 'Not only this' to connect your ideas. While the progression is generally clear, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. For instance, the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate the different topics, which helps the reader follow your argument easily. Overall, the structure is coherent and supports the purpose of your letter well.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your ideas clearly. Phrases like 'utmost talented', 'mood lifting activity', and 'professional careers' are used effectively. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'share the feedback of localities' (should be 'local residents') and 'people ration to meet basic requirements' (which is slightly unclear in this context). While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Expanding your use of more precise, academic vocabulary would enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures throughout the letter. There are some grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The people of our area works') and minor punctuation or article slips ('if you sponsor the children's sports team for the next two year'). Despite these errors, the meaning remains clear, and the mistakes do not cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and pluralization. Your control of complex sentences is developing, and with more attention to detail, you will be able to produce more error-free complex structures.

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