Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

i feel so glad to know that the company of our locality has decided to help our youth sports team for 2 years with sponsership . Even the folks of our area are so preasing the company idea .

Firstly , with the help of this sponsership many youth who has been struggling to collect the funds will get a hope to win the match . Also , sports team members would able to practise properly without any issues of money and essential sports goods . Many people who were struggling with money related issues , will now get a hope to win the match .

Althrough , people will now believe the company for its services as cpmpared to others in the market . Also, Employess with provide their proper support to the company because the companys decision to sponser their childrens sport team .

Also , company shouid notice that it is essential to purchase the equipments for those team members who can hardly afford these costly sports good as well as should take care of the diet , health and tickets of the team .

yours faithfully

Akshay sharma

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all parts of the prompt, including the benefits of the sports team and the concerts, and provided a clear recommendation. However, the response is somewhat unbalanced. You focused heavily on the sports team but failed to actually describe the benefits of the concerts, merely mentioning them in passing. To improve, ensure each bullet point is given equal weight and development. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the lack of specific detail regarding the concerts limits the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'Also' is used at the start of three consecutive sentences). Some transitions are awkward, such as 'Althrough,' which is used incorrectly as a linking word. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking phrases like 'Furthermore,' 'In addition,' or 'Conversely' to create a smoother flow between your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'sponsership', 'preasing', 'cpmpared', 'Employess') and word choice issues. The phrase 'folks of our area' is too informal for a letter to a company. You have attempted some topic-specific vocabulary, but the frequent spelling mistakes and limited range of precise terminology prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading your work to catch these basic errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement ('many youth who has been struggling', 'Employess with provide') and missing articles. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures.

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