Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir/madam,

I am writing about a your company decided a sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, either to pay amount for two big concerts.

Sponsoring a local children’s sports team is better idea. This is big opportunity for kids because they get support on a huge level. Moreover, if your company spend money on sports, children will get motivation to perform a games.

However, sponsors for concerts are not worth it. Some people come or some not. The other reason is that if children. Play well they get a big opportunity to Participate in state level. So , it will also beneficial for your company. They will promote their company as well on big stage. In addition, children will indulge in a good activities rather than spending money on concerts. Because games give them a encouragement to grow in their lives.

I would like appreciate if you spend your money on sports. Another, kids will motivated and build their confidence.

I look forward to your response.

Yours faithfully,

Xyz

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the benefits of the sports team, the benefits of the concerts, and a clear recommendation. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. For example, the argument against concerts is limited to 'some people come or some not,' which is a weak point. The recommendation is clear, but the reasoning could be more sophisticated to fully meet the requirements of a higher band. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the structure is slightly disjointed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, 'Another, kids will motivated' is not a standard way to introduce a new point. Transitions between ideas are sometimes abrupt, such as the sudden shift from discussing concert attendance to the benefits of sports participation. While the overall message is clear, the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. There is a reliance on basic words like 'big,' 'good,' and 'money.' Phrases such as 'huge level' and 'indulge in a good activities' are slightly unnatural. There are also some minor errors in word choice, such as 'I would like appreciate' instead of 'I would appreciate.' To improve, you should aim to use more specific collocations and avoid repeating the same adjectives throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writing contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Common issues include missing articles ('a sponsor'), incorrect verb forms ('if your company spend'), and subject-verb agreement errors ('kids will motivated'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization after periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band score.

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