Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter on behalf of our community to provide feedback regarding two options: either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts.

On the one hand, sponsoring the sports team has many pros, one of them is convenience. If the community will be sponsored by you, it will create substantial impact on the youth. They will be more interested in the sporting activities. As a result, it will improve their strength and stamina.

On the other hand, paying for the concerts will help the community to unwind from their day to day activities. Not only that, it will also help them to be social and give them opportunity to meet people of their own community.

In my view, I believe you should invest in sponsoring children’s sport team, that would be the long term benefit as compared to arranging two live concerts, which can give happiness to the community for a limited time.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task effectively. You described the benefits of the sports team, summarized the benefits of the concerts, and clearly stated your preference for the sports sponsorship. Your position is consistent throughout the letter. To reach a higher band, you could provide more specific examples of how the sports team would benefit the community, such as mentioning local health initiatives or community pride, rather than just general health benefits. The ideas are relevant and well-developed, meeting the requirements of the task fully.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each option, and a concluding recommendation. You use transition signals such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'As a result' to guide the reader. However, some of the cohesive devices are a bit mechanical or repetitive. For instance, the transition between sentences could be smoother to improve the flow. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different ideas, which helps the reader follow your argument easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. You use terms like 'substantial impact', 'unwind', and 'long term benefit' appropriately. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'pros' which is slightly informal for a formal letter, and 'the community will be sponsored by you' which sounds a bit unnatural. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic or formal vocabulary to enhance the sophistication of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is always clear, there are some grammatical errors, such as 'one of them is convenience' (should be 'one of which is convenience') and 'sponsoring children’s sport team' (missing an article). Additionally, the sentence 'If the community will be sponsored by you' contains an unnecessary future tense in the 'if' clause. Despite these errors, they do not impede communication. Increasing the variety of complex structures and proofreading for minor articles would help improve your score.

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