Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope you are doing well.

I am writing to give feedback about your sponsorship whether spend money on children's sports club or to pay for two open concerts from the general public

There are several benefits to sponsor a local children's sport team. it helps children to learn communication, team works and leadership skills. this is also important to become children more creative and independent it also encourage children to take part in sports activities. playing a sports make people more physically and mentally fit.

On the other hand, there are also some advantages of having open -air concerts. it helps people relax and refresh their mind. it also allows individuals to take a break from their busy routine. spending time with their friends and families during concerts encourage people take part in concerts.

I believe company should spend money on a local children's club because it is important for children's mental and physical well-being.

Thank you for your time and considerations.

Yours Faithfully

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: describing the benefits of the sports team, summarizing the benefits of the concerts, and stating your preference. Your position is clear from the start and maintained throughout the letter. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat basic. For example, while you mention 'communication' and 'leadership skills' for the sports team, these points could be expanded further to fully meet the criteria for a higher band. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter, and the purpose is clear to the reader.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, with each paragraph focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'On the other hand' and 'I believe' to transition between ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of varied linking words. Some sentences feel disconnected, such as the transition between 'independent' and 'it also encourage' in the second paragraph. Improving the variety of your cohesive devices would help the ideas flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You use a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, such as 'physically and mentally fit' and 'refresh their mind'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'whether spend money' instead of 'whether to spend money' and 'take part in concerts' which is slightly repetitive. You rely on fairly common vocabulary; to reach a higher band, you should attempt to use more precise or sophisticated collocations related to community support and social benefits.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'it also encourage children'), missing articles (e.g., 'playing a sports'), and punctuation errors (e.g., 'open -air'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency of the writing. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for small errors like pluralization and verb endings will significantly improve your score.

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