Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Hi dear
I received your letter sir . I think you planing to invest some money for sports . This is your best decision for helping the best future for new generation . So i wanna suggest you some ideas for investing your money . In my area don’t have any playground and sports teaching academy. My best opinion is you must invest in play ground and academy . My area have so many children’s and students he also wand something new in area any ground . Near my home one playground and he also on sale . If your company interested you must buy. And build one big sports academy and nice playground . And please hire professional two trainers . Then he teaching children's. And children parents he also want children playing and achieving good prizes in tournaments. You can charge money month by month for children Or paid membership .
Jaspal Singh
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the core requirements of the prompt. While you mention the sports team, you do not summarize the benefits of the open-air concerts at all, which is a key instruction. Furthermore, the task asks you to choose between two options provided by the company, but you instead suggest an entirely different project (buying land and building an academy), which deviates from the task instructions. The tone is also informal and inappropriate for a formal letter to a company. To improve, ensure you address every bullet point in the prompt and stick to the options provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks a clear structure. It is written as a single block of text rather than using appropriate paragraphing to separate the different points requested. There is a lack of cohesive devices; sentences are often linked by simple conjunctions like 'and' or 'so', making the flow feel repetitive and mechanical. The progression of ideas is disjointed, particularly when moving from the suggestion of the sports team to the proposal of buying land. Using transition words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' would help create a more logical flow between your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic words like 'money', 'good', and 'nice' throughout the text. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'he also wand something new' (should be 'they also want') and 'achieving good prizes' (should be 'winning prizes'). The informal opening 'Hi dear' is not suitable for a formal letter to a company. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to community projects, sponsorship, and investment, and ensure you use words in their correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('My area have', 'children parents he also want'), incorrect pronoun usage ('he' used for plural children), and missing articles ('in area', 'on sale'). Sentence structures are predominantly simple, with very few attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before punctuation marks. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of pronouns, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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