Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope you are doing well. My name is Shraddha, and I am a resident of Hamilton. I have heard that you are looking for feedback from the general public. I am writing this letter to give feedback on where you should spend a certain amount of funds. Both options have their own benefits, such as spending money on a local toddler's sports team, which is beneficial for local aspiring children to play internationally. Apart from this, it can encourage pupils to exercise, improve mental well-being, and participate in a sports team.

However, if this fund contributes to open-air concerts, then it would encourage people to join in the concerts. Additionally, some individuals do not have enough money to attend this kind of concert, which will help them to see and feel what it would be like.

In conclusion, I would recommend investing your money in a sports team because it would help toddlers grow up.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly describe the benefits of the sports team and the concerts, and you state your preference. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the argument for the sports team is repetitive, and the explanation for the concerts is slightly vague regarding how it helps people 'see and feel' the experience. To reach a higher band, ensure that your supporting points are more detailed and logically expanded. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter, and the purpose is clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the task. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Apart from this', 'However', and 'Additionally' to connect your ideas. While the flow is generally smooth, some transitions feel a bit mechanical. The progression of ideas is easy to follow, and the use of paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the relationship between sentences is more nuanced rather than relying on simple additive connectors.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'aspiring', 'contributes', and 'investing'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as referring to a 'toddler's sports team'—toddlers are typically too young for competitive sports teams, and 'local children's sports team' would be more natural. Additionally, the phrase 'join in the concerts' is slightly simplistic. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but it lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. Most of your sentences are clear and grammatically correct, which ensures that communication is not impeded. There are a few minor issues, such as 'some individuals do not have enough money to attend this kind of concert, which will help them to see and feel what it would be like'—the relative clause is slightly awkward here. Overall, you show good control over basic grammar, but you need to incorporate a wider variety of complex structures with greater accuracy to move into the higher bands.

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