Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to express my opinion weather a large company spend amount of money on sports or concerts. In my point of view spending money on sports is more effective and beneficial for company and the local community.
There are several advantages of spending money on sports. First, sports encourage people to stay fit, healthy and active. a company that supports sports improve it's public image by showing that actually cares for people's health. Additionally, sports event can bring communities together and give a chance to the youngsters to develop teamwork, discipline and confidence.
On the other hand, spending money on concerts have their own benefits. Concerts can entertain a large number of people and can supports local musicians. They can also attracts visitors and create lively atmosphere, However, concerts are an short-term event. While investment in sports community can provide benefits for many years.
Personally, I believe company should spent money on sports. as this can leads to healthy lifestyle and open more opportunities to younger people and create long-term benefits for community. Nevertheless, company should also organise occasional concerts to support culture and provide entertainment.
Yours faithfully,
Princy k.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: describing the benefits of the sports team, summarizing the benefits of the concerts, and providing a clear recommendation. The position is consistent throughout the letter. The ideas are relevant and logically developed, though the development could be slightly more detailed to reach a higher band. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a company. Overall, the response fulfills the requirements of the task effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. Cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'On the other hand', and 'Nevertheless' are used to guide the reader through the argument. However, there are some minor issues with referencing and flow, such as the slightly abrupt transition between the second and third paragraphs. Paragraphing is used appropriately, and the overall structure is clear and easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their ideas clearly. There are some attempts at using topic-specific vocabulary, such as 'long-term benefits' and 'lively atmosphere'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'spending money on concerts have their own benefits' (should be 'has') and 'an short-term event' (should be 'a'). While the range is sufficient, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('company should spent', 'concerts... can supports') and article usage ('an short-term event'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some errors in sentence boundaries and capitalization. These errors do not impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score in this criterion.
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