Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this mail to offer a suggestion regarding spend money on local children's sport team or to pay for open ground concerts, and will discuss which option is more beneficial to our community.
To begin with, spending money towards local sport team have many benefits. Firstly, by sponsoring team, they are able to hire best coach, which helps members to get best training for their game. Secondly, by having enough budget, institute can spend money towards nutrition requirements for their sports team members, as it is very important for their fitness.
On the other hand, sponsoring to a open air concerts helps communities to gather at same place, which helps them to know about different culture while enjoying concert. Moreover, large company are able to get returns through investing in concert. As a result, company have very less percentage of negative revenue from this option.
As a result, although investing in concert is largely benefits to company only, spending money towards sports team have many advantages including society. Therefore, I think spending towards sport team is the best option for your company.
I hope this matter will receive your prompt attention.
Yours sincerely.
Sagar.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response addresses all three bullet points of the task. You have described the benefits of the sports team, summarized the benefits of the concerts, and clearly stated your preference. The ideas are relevant and the position is consistent throughout the letter. To improve, you could provide more specific, illustrative examples for the benefits mentioned, such as how the community specifically benefits from the sports team beyond just 'fitness'. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter, and the purpose is clear from the beginning.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct focus. You use transition signals such as 'To begin with', 'Secondly', 'On the other hand', and 'Moreover' to guide the reader. However, some of these cohesive devices feel slightly mechanical. Additionally, there are some minor issues with referencing and flow, such as the phrase 'sponsoring to a open air concerts' which disrupts the cohesion. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear, and the paragraphing is used effectively to separate the different requirements of the task.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'nutrition requirements', 'community', and 'investing'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'spend money on' instead of 'spending money on', 'sponsoring to a open air concerts', and 'negative revenue'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more natural collocations and ensuring articles (a/an/the) are used correctly with nouns.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('spending money... have many benefits') and article usage ('a open air concerts', 'the best coach'). There are also minor punctuation and phrasing issues, such as 'I am writing this mail' (email is more standard) and 'Yours sincerely. Sagar.' (the period after sincerely is incorrect). While these errors are noticeable, they rarely impede the reader's understanding of your message.
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