Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope this letter finds you in good health and high spirits. I am writing letter in order to inform you about my feedback on your company's decision to spend certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for open-air concert.

Nowadays, children are not able to play at a high level because they don't have any sponsors for their team. Your company should pay the certain amount of money to sponsor their team. With the help of sponsor their team would play with their full capacity and could buy any equipment that they needs. But, there are also some benefits of paying for the concerts. Students could join that open-air concerts to complete their desire to enjoy live music. This will help to students and other people who can't afford concert tickets.

As per my opinion, I think your company should sponsor a local sports team to encourage them to play at high level. This would be best opportunity to support local sports team. I will be pleasured of your company spend money to sponsor local sports team.

Yours faithfully,

Satnam Singh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly describe the benefits of the sports team sponsorship and the concerts, and you provide a clear recommendation. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the benefits of the concerts are described in very general terms ('complete their desire to enjoy live music'). To reach a higher band, you should expand on these points with more specific details or examples. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter, and your position is consistent throughout the text.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for the two options, and a concluding recommendation. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Nowadays', 'But', and 'As per my opinion' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes a bit mechanical. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that referencing (e.g., 'that open-air concerts') is more precise. The paragraphing is appropriate for the task type.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'sponsor', 'equipment', and 'opportunity'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'I will be pleasured of your company spend money' and 'complete their desire'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your word forms (e.g., 'pleased' vs 'pleasured') are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('sponsor a local children's sports team'), subject-verb agreement issues ('equipment that they needs'), and awkward phrasing ('I am writing letter'). These errors occur frequently but rarely prevent the reader from understanding your message. To reach a higher band, focus on proofreading for basic errors like articles and verb endings, and try to incorporate more complex sentence structures with greater accuracy.

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