Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or madam,

I hope you are well. We are happy that you company have plan to invest on our team. There are lots of benefits can get if you sponsor this team because this team have good improvement in game but they just face financial difficulty. If you sponsor the team then they can get higher achievement and can represent the company in future.

If your company invest on concert that provide the huge earn to company because this concert will held on tourist attractive place where every one can buy concert ticket.

I think this is the best deal for the company to spend money for this because the team is grow which can give fame to company which can lead to extra profit and secondly this concert will held first time if this concert get great profit the company can get next contract for one decade.

Thank for my feedback,

Kulwinder Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: describing the benefits of the sports team, the benefits of the concerts, and providing a recommendation. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the explanation regarding the sports team's 'financial difficulty' and 'higher achievement' is quite brief. Similarly, the argument for the concerts focuses heavily on profit without exploring the community impact. While the position is clear, the ideas could be more fully extended to reach a higher band. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the structure is slightly simplistic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite basic and sometimes mechanical. Phrases like 'If you sponsor the team then' and 'secondly this concert' are used to link ideas, but the flow between sentences is often jerky. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where 'this' is used to refer to multiple concepts simultaneously. The progression of ideas is logical, but the lack of varied linking words makes the writing feel somewhat disjointed.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks range and precision. There is frequent repetition of basic words like 'company', 'team', and 'concert'. Some word choices are unnatural or incorrect, such as 'huge earn' instead of 'significant revenue' or 'tourist attractive place' instead of 'tourist attraction'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of more sophisticated or varied vocabulary limits the score. To improve, you should focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding the repetition of simple nouns and verbs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('you company have plan', 'this team have good improvement', 'this concert will held'). Articles are also frequently missing or misused ('the company', 'a tourist attractive place'). While the meaning is usually understandable, these persistent errors indicate a lack of control over basic structures. The sentence structures are mostly simple or compound; there is very little evidence of complex sentence forms. Improving your grasp of verb tenses and article usage is essential for a higher score.

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