Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Sir,
I am writing to inform you about your idea that your company sponsor a youngsters in team for 2 years. i think it is a great activity for children also.
I am very excited about this project because it a great opportunity for children . I t also help them to participate in various kind of activities whichever they like and has interest.
it also help them to gain a confidence, improve communication skills.
Another it is not affordable for everyone to pay for concerts so it is also beneficial for locals, poor people and also get a opportunity who did not even seen concert in their life but now they get a offer.
another benefit is also helps in meeting new people, make some new friends.
A company should spend money give a scholarship to children who are very good in sports. let them introduce to their new coach, if any equipment need them should pay for them, if anything in ground needs to modify it is very helpful for them.
Thankyou.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all three bullet points of the task: describing the benefits of the sports team, summarizing the benefits of the concerts, and providing a recommendation. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited and repetitive. For instance, the benefits of the sports team are mentioned in general terms without specific examples of how the sponsorship would function. The recommendation is somewhat confusing, as it shifts from supporting the sports team to suggesting scholarships and facility modifications. While the task is addressed, the lack of depth and the somewhat disjointed nature of the arguments prevent it from reaching a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks a clear structure. The paragraphs are not well-defined, and the transition between ideas is often abrupt. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and sometimes misused, such as starting sentences with 'Another' or 'another benefit' without proper context or grammatical integration. The flow of the letter is hindered by these mechanical transitions, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the argument. To improve, you should use clear paragraph breaks for each main point and employ a wider variety of linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition'.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'great activity', 'great opportunity', and 'help them' are used multiple times, which limits the range of expression. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'youngsters in team' instead of 'youth sports team' and 'did not even seen concert' instead of 'had never attended a concert'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the reliance on simple, repetitive language indicate a limited lexical range that struggles to convey more complex ideas effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('it also help them'), article usage ('a youngsters', 'a opportunity'), and sentence structure (e.g., 'whichever they like and has interest'). The letter relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of capital letters and spacing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms.
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