Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to provide my feedback on your decision to spend some amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It is a very generous thought.

There are many benefits for sponsoring a local children's sports team. Firstly, young children spend most of their day by playing games on computer or cellphones because of which obesity is seen highly among infants. However, if they get a platform to showcase their talent, they will be inspired to play more outdoors. Also, if children play together, they will get a chance to socialize with other children of the locality. Moreover, there are many parents who cannot afford to pay fees for their children's sports.

Conversely, paying for two open air concerts will be beneficial as well because a music concert will create a fandom environment where people of all ages can come together and enjoy at one place. Music brings joy and energy in people's lives. Also, it will allow people to become stress free in open air.

Therefore, I would suggest you to spend money to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years because it will be beneficial to children as well as their parents as they do not have to worry about their children's health if they play outside and by seeing a team playing together, other children who are not a part of that team will get an inspiration as well.

I hope you would like my suggestion and decide wisely to sponsor a sports team for local children.

Yours faithfully,

Alex White

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have addressed all parts of the prompt effectively. You clearly described the benefits of both the sports team sponsorship and the open-air concerts, and you provided a clear, supported recommendation. Your ideas are well-developed, particularly regarding the health benefits for children and the social aspects of the concerts. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter, and your position is consistent throughout. To reach a higher band, ensure that your arguments are slightly more nuanced; for example, you could briefly mention the long-term community impact of the sports team versus the immediate entertainment value of the concerts to add more depth to your reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each option, and a concluding recommendation. You use cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Also', 'Moreover', and 'Conversely' to guide the reader through your arguments. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas. While the flow is generally smooth, some transitions could be more sophisticated to avoid a slightly mechanical feel. For instance, instead of starting sentences with 'Also' repeatedly, you could integrate these points into existing sentences using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to improve the overall cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'obesity', 'socialize', 'fandom environment', and 'generous thought'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'obesity is seen highly among infants' is slightly unnatural; 'prevalent among children' would be more precise. Similarly, 'fandom environment' is not the most standard collocation for a concert setting. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and academic phrasing. Your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but it lacks the flexibility and precision required for the higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'I am writing this letter to provide...' and 'if they get a platform... they will be inspired...'. While your meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'spend some amount of money' (unnecessary 'some'), 'because of which obesity is seen highly' (awkward phrasing), and 'I would suggest you to spend' (the verb 'suggest' is typically followed by a gerund or a 'that' clause). Increasing the variety of complex structures and ensuring greater accuracy in verb patterns will help you achieve a higher score.

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