Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to provide valuable feedback regarding a decision you want to make for the well-being of the society.

Firstly, a number of benefits are there for sponsoring a local children's sport team for two years. Our local football team wants to play for international, but they required some essential equipment and a professional coach who can train them efficiently. Financial assistance from your side would make a great impact on their performance.

Moreover, sponsoring for open-air concerts also has several advantages. One of the compelling benefit is that there was no live concert held in our society, so paying for concert can provide an opportunity to local people to experience live performance by a renowned artist.

I personally believe that at the moment you should prioritize sport team as it enables children to develop their career in sports field. Instead of spending time indoors, children are encouraged to take part in sports that can develop their critical thinking, and make them physically and mentally fit.

Thank you for your consideration. I hope this feedback helps.

Yours faithfully,

Pooja Rani

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points of the prompt effectively. You clearly described the benefits of the sports team, summarized the advantages of the concerts, and provided a clear recommendation. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are slightly more developed; for instance, when mentioning the sports team, you could elaborate on how the sponsorship specifically benefits the wider community beyond just the team members. Overall, the response is well-focused and meets the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each point, and a conclusion. You use transition signals such as 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'Instead of' to guide the reader through your arguments. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas. To improve, ensure that your referencing is always precise; for example, in the second paragraph, 'paying for concert' should be 'paying for the concerts' to maintain better flow and cohesion. The progression of ideas is clear throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your ideas clearly. Phrases like 'financial assistance', 'compelling benefit', and 'prioritize' are used effectively. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'play for international' (should be 'play internationally') and 'in our society' (where 'community' would be more natural). Expanding your range of collocations and ensuring more precise word choices would help you move into the higher band range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. While the majority of your sentences are clear, there are some grammatical slips, such as 'a number of benefits are there for sponsoring' (which is slightly awkward phrasing) and 'they required' (should be 'they require' for consistency in tense). Punctuation is generally accurate. To improve, focus on ensuring consistent verb tenses and refining the structure of your complex sentences to minimize these occasional errors.

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