Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well ! Spending money for public benefits is an excellent idea. I am writing to suggest that, company should spend money to sponsor a local children sports.

To begin with, sponsoring the sports team will motivate individuals to play and enhances their performance. As, they can afford advanced equipment's. Likewise, it will also increases their safety. Moreover, the team will able to get the extra assistance as they can afford the new coaches.

Paying for air concerts will help to escalates the revenue. As it will increases the tourism. More the number of visitors more will the revenue. This could also, uplift the employment opportunities as the number of jobs would create. City will became more crowded.

I firmly, believe that company should spend the money to improves public health and physical well-being by sponsoring a local children sports team.

Best Regards

Priyam

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the prompt: describing the benefits of the sports team, summarizing the benefits of the concerts, and stating your preference. Your position is clear from the beginning and maintained throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, when discussing the concerts, you mention 'revenue' and 'tourism' but do not fully explain how these benefits compare to the long-term social impact of a youth sports team. To reach a higher band, ensure that your arguments are more thoroughly extended with specific examples or logical consequences.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, each focusing on a specific part of the task. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Likewise', and 'Moreover'. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly misused, such as 'As, they can afford...' and 'More the number of visitors more will the revenue', which disrupts the flow of your argument. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used naturally will help your writing progress more smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'public benefits', 'advanced equipment', and 'employment opportunities'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'paying for air concerts' (should be 'open-air concerts') and 'the team will able to get' (should be 'will be able to'). To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical form.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is a good start. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede readability. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('it will also increases', 'it will increases'), unnecessary commas ('I firmly, believe'), and incorrect pluralization ('equipment's'). While the meaning remains clear, these persistent errors prevent the text from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and punctuation rules will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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