Band 7.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this response to give my opinion on the difficult selection between two crucial prospects for your sponsorship. As we know, investing in our children's sports team is extremely important to boost our children's morale. Sponsoring youth sports teams will not only help inspire more youngsters to participate in games, but also help them maintain good physical health. This investment can help them learn from professionals. This can benefit them in the future to be on our national teams.

On the other hand, having free open-air concerts can be therapeutic for the locals. As we all know, after COVID, all the people in our town are going through tough times. Having some music that they can enjoy with their friends and family can definitely relieve a little stress in their daily lives. This can also help locals to reconnect with the people in town.

While both options have their own benefits, I strongly believe that the money should be spent on the sports teams. This option has more long-term benefits for the youth. Also, this can help children to learn the games from professionals, which might help them in the future.

Thank you so much for asking for feedback.

Yours sincerely,

PP

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have addressed all three bullet points of the prompt effectively. You clearly described the benefits of the sports sponsorship and the concerts, and you provided a clear, consistent position regarding your preference for the sports team. The ideas are relevant and logically developed. To reach a higher band, you could provide more specific detail or 'real-world' examples to further extend your arguments, such as mentioning specific types of sports equipment or the community-building aspect of the concerts in greater depth. Overall, the response is well-focused and meets the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each option, and a concluding recommendation. You use paragraphing appropriately to separate distinct ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'On the other hand', 'While both options', and 'As we know' are used effectively to guide the reader through your argument. The progression of ideas is smooth and easy to follow. To improve, you could vary your linking words slightly more to avoid repetitive sentence starters, but the current structure is already quite clear and functional.

Lexical Resource — Band 7.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your ideas clearly. Phrases like 'crucial prospects', 'therapeutic', and 'long-term benefits' are used appropriately. There is a good attempt to use topic-specific language. However, the vocabulary is somewhat functional and lacks the 'less common' or more sophisticated collocations that would push the score into the 8.0+ range. For example, 'tough times' and 'good physical health' are accurate but quite standard. Expanding your repertoire of academic or formal synonyms would enhance the precision and style of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'Sponsoring youth sports teams will not only help inspire... but also help them...'. Your control of grammar is generally good, and your sentences are mostly error-free. There are no major grammatical slips that impede communication. To achieve a higher band, you should aim for a greater variety of complex grammatical structures, such as conditional sentences or more sophisticated passive constructions, and ensure that your punctuation is consistently precise throughout the text.

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