Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to provide my positive feedback on the ideas that are planned by your company in our neighbourhood.

First of all, I appreciate you taking time and considering helping our community to develop. To begin with, there are numerous benefits to sponsoring the local children's sports team. Firstly, this initiative enhances the sports abilities of the local children and also creates awareness on the importance of taking up a sport. Secondly, this also provides an opportunity for the underprivileged kids who do not have financial stability to support their talent in sports and continue to play.

On the other hand, organising concerts in the local area caters to different age groups and bring the whole community together to relax and enjoy music with their family and friends after their diligent work throughout the year. These concerts provide a platform for everyone to connect with their neighbours or people with similar interests.

However, I am very keen on allocating funds to sports teams for two years. It will be beneficial for our community children to increase their physical and mental strength.

Thank you for considering our opinions. Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Cathy Karen

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

The response successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly describe the benefits of the sports team sponsorship, such as skill development and support for underprivileged children, and provide a balanced summary of the concert proposal. Your position is clearly stated in the final paragraph, where you advocate for the sports team. The ideas are relevant and well-developed, meeting the requirements of the task effectively. To reach a higher band, you could provide slightly more specific detail on why the sports option is superior to the concerts, perhaps by contrasting the long-term impact of sports versus the temporary nature of a concert.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each option, and a concluding recommendation. You use appropriate cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'To begin with', 'Secondly', and 'On the other hand' to guide the reader through your arguments. The paragraphing is appropriate and contributes to the overall clarity of the message. The flow of ideas is smooth, and the transition between the benefits of the sports team and the concerts is handled well. The structure is professional and fits the requirements of a formal letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary appropriate for a formal letter, such as 'initiative', 'underprivileged', 'financial stability', and 'diligent'. The language is natural and conveys your meaning clearly. There are no significant errors in word choice or collocation. To improve further, you could incorporate more sophisticated or less common lexical items to demonstrate a wider range, such as using 'foster' instead of 'creates' or 'community cohesion' instead of 'bring the whole community together'. Overall, the vocabulary is precise and sufficient for the task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures effectively. Most sentences are error-free, and your control over punctuation and verb tenses is strong. For example, 'I am writing to provide my positive feedback' and 'It will be beneficial for our community children to increase their physical and mental strength' are grammatically sound. There are no major errors that impede communication. To achieve a higher score, ensure you vary your sentence beginnings even more and aim for a slightly higher frequency of complex, error-free structures throughout the text.

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