Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to provide my positive feedback on the ideas that are planned by your company in our neighbourhood.

First of all, I appreciate you taking time and considering helping our community to develop. To begin with, there are numerous benefits to sponsoring the local children's sports team. Firstly, this initiative enhances the sports abilities of the local children and also foster awareness of the importance of taking up a sport. Secondly, this also provides an opportunity for the underprivileged kids who do not have financial stability to support their talent in sports and continue to play.

On the other hand, organising concerts in the local area caters to different age groups and community cohesion to relax and enjoy music with their family and friends after their diligent work throughout the year. These concerts provide a platform for everyone to connect with their neighbours or people with similar interests.

However, I am very keen on allocating funds to sports teams for two years. It will be beneficial for our community children to increase their physical and mental strength.

Thank you for considering our opinions. Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Cathy Karen

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all parts of the prompt effectively. You clearly described the benefits of the sports team sponsorship and the concerts, and you provided a clear recommendation for the company's investment. Your ideas are relevant and well-developed, particularly regarding the social and physical benefits of the sports initiative. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter, and the purpose is clear from the outset. To reach a higher band, ensure that the benefits of the concerts are explored with the same depth as the sports team, as the current explanation is slightly more concise.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The letter is logically organised with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each option, and a concluding recommendation. You use a range of cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'To begin with', 'Secondly', and 'On the other hand' to guide the reader through your arguments. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate distinct ideas. The progression of ideas is smooth, and the relationship between the paragraphs is clear. The use of referencing is generally accurate, ensuring the text flows well throughout.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your ideas with precision. Phrases like 'community cohesion', 'underprivileged kids', and 'diligent work' show a good command of language. There are some minor collocations that could be more natural, such as 'foster awareness of the importance of taking up a sport' (which is slightly wordy) or 'financial stability to support their talent'. However, the vocabulary is consistently appropriate for the task, and there are no errors that impede communication. You successfully use a mix of common and less common lexical items.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures effectively. Most of your sentences are error-free, and your control over grammar is generally strong. There are a few minor slips, such as 'the ideas that are planned' (which could be more concisely phrased as 'the proposed initiatives') and 'foster awareness' (should be 'fosters' to agree with the subject 'initiative'). Despite these minor issues, your control of punctuation and sentence structure is good, and the meaning is always clear. You demonstrate a solid grasp of complex grammatical forms.

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