Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well.

I am writing this letter to let you know about my suggestions about sponsership. I have heard that your company has already decided to spend some amount as a sponsership In different activities.

To commence with, There are three benefits to sponsering the sport team. Firstly, team will get motivation to play better than last time. Secondly, your reputation will going to build up as you are spending alot. Moreover, team is going to represent India at the international level if it wins. So, this is more like investment.

Furthermore, There is a one more suggetion for spending on concerts. We belong to a rich cultural society so it is going to be encouraging for fresh talent aspirants.

I would highly recommend that conpany should spend highest amount on children's sport team as it enhance their mental development and physical growth.

Yours faithfully,

Devanshi Vasani

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly describe the benefits of the sports team and the concerts, and you provide a clear recommendation for how the company should spend the money. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the benefits of the concerts are mentioned very briefly, and the explanation of the sports team's benefits could be more detailed to fully satisfy the requirements for a higher band. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter, and the purpose is clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Furthermore' to link your ideas. However, some of these transitions feel a bit mechanical. Additionally, the paragraphing is slightly unbalanced, with the second paragraph being quite long compared to the others. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring a more even distribution of information across paragraphs would help to achieve a higher score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. There are several spelling errors, such as 'sponsership' (sponsorship), 'sponsering' (sponsoring), and 'conpany' (company). These errors are noticeable but do not significantly impede communication. To improve, you should focus on using more varied and sophisticated vocabulary related to business and community support, and ensure you check your spelling carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'your reputation will going to build up' (should be 'will build up' or 'is going to build up') and 'There is a one more suggetion' (should be 'There is one more suggestion'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to impact the overall accuracy of your writing. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct verb tense usage will help improve your score.

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